MY HERO

The person who will fight the world for me 

The person who means everything to me

The man who always there to wipe my tears 

The man who always fights away my fears 

The angel who showed me how to love 

The angel who protected me when I was weak as a dove 

The guy who spent his teenage life working for me 

The guy who lives in hell just to give me a happy family 

The hero who burns himself just to give me light 

The hero who always shows me the right 

The dad without him I don't know where I would be

The dad who's little girl I am proud to be 

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Again, with so many reviews on the shelf there's probably little I can add. And if someone else already mentioned what I'm about to say, forgive me and move on. One question on the content or story line. In the middle verse you mention the "guy who spends his teenage life". Was this still referring to your dad? Also, the third line you could say 'The man who will always wipe my tears'. The next-to-last line instead of "The dad without him" you might say 'The dad without whom'. Your poem is wonderful as is. I'm just trying to offer something. I don't think it's right to just mouth repetitious praise like a rubber stamp on everyone's work. My honest opinion I will always give, only after I've actually read a piece several times and given it careful thought.

[Brittany]

I agree with the "whom"
Also I am assuming that your dad was young when you were born; hence, the 'teenage life' but perhaps it should be 'spent' rather than 'spends'

[Satire69]

this dad seems really special. :)

[afra]

he is he is everything to me ...

[Matty Bosox]

I really HATE to say I told you so Afra but I TOLD YOU SO!!! Once again you let your mind off the leash and went absolutely wild on this poem!!! And I mean wild in a GREAT way...An amazingly described, awesomely rhymed, and emotionally charged way...NOT the wild "Oh you misspelled this or you misspelled that type of way" Last time I checked this was a place to express your feelings through writing...Not a spelling Bee...Sow u lett ur mined of tha leashe agane annd LoL I'll stop...You unleashed a ravaging, snarling, biting, beast of a poem...This is why it is so terrific...Keep it up Afra..

[afra]

thank you so much ...=D

[That_Girl]

"The man who aways" should be 'always'
"The angel who proteced" should be 'protected'
"The guy who spend" needs to be 'spent' or 'spends'

Such a sweet poem. He must be so proud of you. :)

[afra]

okay thanks

[Krista Weiss]

Really sweet! :) Love it!

[afra]

thanks

[J. F. Charleston]

Very good! I enjoyed it! Could you read my poem Stolen Heart?

[afra]

yeh sure ...and thanks

[EileenMarie]

I love this!! Great job

[afra]

thank you

[Olivia Marie]

Beautifully written :) Loved the style :) It was great. I enjoyed reading it :)

[afra]

thanks

[Whiskurz]

What a Beautiful Tribute to the Hero in your life......Bravo my friend.......Whisk

[afra]

thanks you

[murrill]

Great poem Makes me miss my Dad who ever he is. LOL Just kiddin This poem is alsome.

[afra]

thanks

[Arik]

Really good, I know my dad would love something like this.

[afra]

thanks