I HAVE FOUND MY LIFE IN YOU

I HAVE FOUND MY LIFE IN YOU

A Poem by afra

I will walk behind you

And break all other ties

I will leave the path that

Does not lead to you

I will attach my all dreams

And hope with you

I will break all my other relationships

With a smile for you

I will only maintain a relationship 

Of heart with you

I will give you my everything 

I'll give up my life for you

My life is now attached with yours

I have found my happiness in you

My heart will beat with the beat of your heart 

I have seen my heaven in you 

I will love you forever 

Cause I have found my life in you

© 2012 afra


Author's Note

afra
I know I am not good at writing love poem ..but still tell what you think

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This poem has a gentle, friendly feel. It speaks of commitment and attachment bringing joy and friendship. I like the way you repeat the expression 'in you' throughout the poem, focusing the reader's attention on the recipient. Hopefully, the offer will be reciprocated.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Seems like you'd be a very devoted girlfriend :)
There's pathos and it's sincere ... just try to articolate more next time, it's like you're shouting your love, we're close to you, no need to shout, just speak it.
You're Canadian, right? Since you speak French, give a try to French literature, it has so many poets that could inspire you in this kind of topic, talking about Christine de Pizan (I LOVE her), Charles D'Orleans, Luise Labé and so on :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love the idea of attaching dreams and hope to a relationship. I think I have tons of interpretations for this. Great poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is one of your better poems I have read so far. Very gentle, yet realistic read.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I had a strange reaction to this piece. It was a mixture both sublime joy at the memory of this feeling in my own life and sadness for the loss of the individual. It is most likely my current situation in life that leads me to feel that love can be felt without the abandonment of one's self for another.

You wrote this very well. It is a joy to read and I did not note anything needing addressing. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I've felt this wonderful feeling before! I think you actually done an amazing job with this! I can say that a lot of people can relate to this piece including myself. It's so beautiful and touches the heart. Again, great job Afra! :D


Ashley Rivers-- Keep writing! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


I've felt this before and this was a great poem. Good job

Posted 9 Years Ago


simple yet meaningful

Posted 9 Years Ago


Your author's note, what I think; you are good at writing love poems. I love the ending in this poem. Really nice.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is very soft and calm, I love how you gave this person the strength of love to destroy everything else to be with him or her.

Posted 9 Years Ago


sweet:)

Posted 9 Years Ago



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