I HAVE FOUND MY LIFE IN YOU

I will walk behind you

And break all other ties

I will leave the path that

Does not lead to you

I will attach my all dreams

And hope with you

I will break all my other relationships

With a smile for you

I will only maintain a relationship 

Of heart with you

I will give you my everything 

I'll give up my life for you

My life is now attached with yours

I have found my happiness in you

My heart will beat with the beat of your heart 

I have seen my heaven in you 

I will love you forever 

Cause I have found my life in you

Author's Note

I know I am not good at writing love poem ..but still tell what you think

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

This poem has a gentle, friendly feel. It speaks of commitment and attachment bringing joy and friendship. I like the way you repeat the expression 'in you' throughout the poem, focusing the reader's attention on the recipient. Hopefully, the offer will be reciprocated.

[J. F. Charleston]

Really this is what many people wish to hear everyday. I found it very touching and whole-hearted for the one that the character is talking to. Very well written. I too don't think that I'm not that good at poetry, but still do have a couple that I do like.

[afra]

thanks you

[murrill]

I like the poem some lucky guy will snatch your heart Away from those who try.

Great Job!

[afra]

lol ...thanks

[~Sara~]

Don't put yourself down.. keep your head held high and proud! You are great at writing poems!! I think this is a great love poem. Keep up the good work and never stop trying!

[afra]

thanks

[Brittany]

I think this is sweet. I think the lines 'break all other ties' and 'break all my other relationships' seems a bit redundant. What about how it makes you feel inside?

[afra]

sorry but i didnt get ur question

[Brittany]

Since you said you didn't think you wrote love poems well I wanted to encourage you to express how the love touches your five senses. I think what you have here is good, just wanted to push you.

[afra]

oh ..thanks ....=)

[Dean Kuch®]

This wonderful ode to your one, true love drips with honey-like sweetness and sincerity. It encapsualtes all that one feels, or should feel, for their significant other in a nice and neat little package. You may want to look at this line"... will attach my all dreams..." Did you mean, 'will attach ALL MY dreams? Just wondering...
It was lovely!

[afra]

yeh it can go that way too but i think this one is better ......thanks

[TheJordBaker]

when I saw the title of this I couldn't wait to read it. the poem itself is really cute and well written. Hopefully love like this is out there somewhere!! lol.

well done :)

[afra]

well i think real love is like that ...thanks

[Kevin S.]

For a person who is 'not' good at writing love poems, this is actually really good. I like it. Good Work!

[afra]

thanks

[Beck Louise]

T. Logan- I don't think there should actually be an I before found, if there was it would make no sense. This is a great poem, really really sweet :)

[afra]

thanks

[Destinyxi]

This is really really really sweet. I hope one day I find and have a love like that.

[afra]

i am sure you will ....thanks

[Olivia Marie]

I actually really like it :) It was very good :)

[afra]

thanks