What If I Died?

What If I Died?

A Poem by Alice In My Own Wonderland

  What if I just dropped dead?

  That would make you happy,
  Wouldn't it?

  If my soul was just
  Sucked right out
  Of my body,

  And taken to hell.
  That would put
  A smile on your face,
  Wouldn't it? 

  All of you would laugh,
  And be thankful
  I am dead. 

  Don't worry.

  I will die soon. 

© 2011 Alice In My Own Wonderland


Author's Note

Alice In My Own Wonderland
Probably gonna die soon. I don't know.

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i feel that way all the time... hehe...
id be sad if you were to die :( nya -athena


Posted 9 Years Ago


I don't want you to die D:

Posted 9 Years Ago


I can see your despair, i'm sorry you believe someone feels this way about you. If you ever want to talk, you can message me. Though that sounds kinda creepy, oh well.(=

Posted 9 Years Ago


cooki-eater stole the review right from my hands.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Just a few corrections:
"That would make you happy" - Happy should be Unhappy.
"A smile on your face" - Smaile should be Frown.
"All of you would laugh" - Laugh should be Cry.
"And be thankful" - Thankful should be Upset.
" I will die soon" - Die soon should be Live forever.

I'm Just Sayin'.

Posted 9 Years Ago


hope u dont die soon *hugs* hope things look up for u soon.
good poem as well.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Think on this I assume that you are a teenager which means that you haven't really lived---yet If you are comtemplating suiside you will be dead a heck of a lot longer than you have been alive and all that you could have, would have experanced in life will never be. For along with roses thorns abide It is part of life and should most assuredly be experanced--- Nicely written poem by the bye

Posted 9 Years Ago


Please do not kill yourself! You have so much talent to live for! Yes, times are extremely hard, but keep pushing through! Your actions affect everyone around you, even those you don't know well.

Well written
And I almost cried because I've seen it happen.
And the first thing my boyfriend asked me when we started dating was, "What if I die?"
And he said it the day after one of my friends committed suicide.
Please, for everyone, for your talent and what you have to give to the world with this talent, don't kill yourself. Please.
Kind thoughts
Kiri

Posted 9 Years Ago


i hope not, if you did die, the world would be missing a very wonderfully gifted writer and person!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Please don't kill yourself. I don't know you personally, but I care about you, and you are such an amazing writer. I've added every poem I've read of your to my favorites list. I know I'm probably not going to make any difference by saying any of this, cause you don't even know me. But, I'm sure there's people who care so much about you. Whether you know it or not, and they'd hate to see you go. I'm not gunna say don't say stuff like this, like other people do, cause it's better to say things and let your emotions out, even if it hurts people, rather than keeping it inside. Think about your best friend and if they killed themselves, you'd miss them terribly, you'd be so hurt... well I'm sure your friend feels the same way if that happened to you.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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