A Summer Of Sounds And Images..by Michael

A Summer Of Sounds And Images..by Michael

A Poem by Michael Reisman


The crackling of burgers and hot dogs


On an open grill. The aroma that fills the air


Which makes the appetite soar. Splashing and the


Sound of laughter in an outdoor pool followed by


squeaking wet footprints of happy barefoot children.


The speeches over a microphone of graduating students


At the end of June. Seagulls squawk on a beach during


Sunrise and sunset as the soothing waves rush onto


The beaches sands. A brides emotional tears of joy are caught


By the man hired to film the outdoor wedding


In a summer of sounds and images. I love the natural light


Of the firefly twinkling like a star as the music


Of the crickets lulls me to peaceful sleep.


Perhaps a time of year that makes us smile.


A summer of sounds and images...

© 2015 Michael Reisman


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I like the imagery here, although I feel like there are times when you show and times when you tell. Take this image: "A brides emotional tears of joy are caught / By the man hired to film the outdoor wedding" Since you've already shown there to be a bride, you don't need to tell that it's a wedding. The line before is the same, where you repeat the fact you're on a beach. Just the seagulls and the sand would be enough to show that. A little bit of trimming here and there to remove the repetition and allow the show to come through, and I feel this would be more powerful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Michael Reisman

9 Years Ago

Glad you liked this.



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I like the imagery here, although I feel like there are times when you show and times when you tell. Take this image: "A brides emotional tears of joy are caught / By the man hired to film the outdoor wedding" Since you've already shown there to be a bride, you don't need to tell that it's a wedding. The line before is the same, where you repeat the fact you're on a beach. Just the seagulls and the sand would be enough to show that. A little bit of trimming here and there to remove the repetition and allow the show to come through, and I feel this would be more powerful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michael Reisman

9 Years Ago

Glad you liked this.

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Michael Reisman
Michael Reisman

Eastchester, NY



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