The Tree

Does a tree feel?

I wish I were a tree.

Can trees feel?

Can trees feel the rough antagonizing weather? Like his words

Can they feel the birds and squirrels teetering on their branches? Like his touch

Do they feel their roots sinking into the ground and trying to become stable and stand tall? Like my heart's roots sinking into him

Do they feel the rain and the snow falling down on them, like a river slowly gushing it's treasure? Like my tears

Do they feel the wind blowing, their roots moving, their branches shaking, their leaves leaving? Like his actions

Can they feel when someone decides to strike them down with cold metal and steel?

Do they feel the loss of themselves, and do they lose memories of watching from the years of being planted into the earth? Do they feel the loss and the pain?

Maybe being a tree is not that different from being me.

Author's Note

Written on a whim. I saw a certain picture and it made me sad, I guess. I really do not like this one, but please tell me what you think regardless.

Reviews

[Ayesha Atif]

Hm mm, the concept of the poem is amazing and the poem overall is brilliant.
Perhaps, there is a little error in the formatting, poetries are never formatted and paragraphed the way you have portrayed; even though you have, to make it look different but in 'professional' poetry its never formatted in this manner. (I hope I haven't hurt you).

I really liked the poem, its beautiful, the imagery used has made it magnificent. :)

[Aekmy]

This is great. You've successfully taken a subject and related yourself to it, whether you decided to do this or not. It's very heartfelt. And most of us can relate.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

now..what i really like here is the structure of the poem..the format is very different..there is something so very special about the tress..we could barely imitate them..their resilience has no bounds..they are encumbered by sorrow..yet they do not show...

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe all plant life is alive. Their purpose is create fresh air for us to breath. A outstanding poem. I believe we need to respect nature. We need her more then she need us. If it still your birthday. Happy birthday.
Coyote

[jajones02]

Alex, this poem is amazing. The imagery and concept are amazing. You write like someone well above your age. I love everything, but I would work on this part...

Do they feel the loss of themselves, and do they lose memories of watching from the years of being planted into the earth? Do they feel the loss and the pain?

Maybe being a tree is not that different from being me.

Work with that italicized response thing you have going on...perhaps like this...

Do they feel the loss of themselves, and do they lose memories of watching from the years of being planted into the earth? Do they feel the loss and the pain? (Like me)

Bring this to the writer's group!!!!

[Arthur Crow]

As a pagan I would say yes they can! A very interesting mood and perspective you have expressed here, very much enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

i love the inner thoughts captivated by the exterior thoughts of the tree.. wonderful

i do see where it could be smoothed out in a place or two, but i also know that sometimes, the write is just done *smiles*

[Just Charles]

Some interesting questions posed here. Good write.

[Lauren Marie]

Oh! I liked it, because, as howl said, you compared a tree to a person, and I've never read anything quite like that on this site before. It was creative and unique.
What more can I say? This was great.
~Lauren