The Rabbit Hole

Lay it down, lay me down

Down the rabbit hole, no coming back again

Save the body! Save the brain!

Mentality is forever lost

Rock-a-bye baby, falls from the tree top

Cracks in my foundation begin to crumble

Far enough for distractions, close enough to sting

Poison flows, I'm left alone

The doctor refuses antidote

Selfishness deserves

'No more weeping, you'll make your eyes swell'

A baby cries, and I die

Isolation, seperation, exasperation, there is no destination

Darkness ensues, light is too pure for the person of me

Without my heart, my soul has escaped me

The rabbit hole is the only place for me

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this to to get the emotions off my chest. Please tell me what you think.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Definitely an intriguing write! I liked the depth and abstraction of this piece, and also the strength and punchiness of the emotions that you conveyed. Your poem flowed really well, and I liked the feeling of motion and progression within your piece. The imagery that you created was amazing, and I thought that you captured the concept of the Rabbit Hole really well.
~PaperHearts

[SAAV13]

Wow. This was really good. I liked it a lot. It flowed very well and was very beautifully written. Well done

[there is no more from m..]

i liked this poem well done

[Lexi Nicole]

I love it! Very deep, a great outpouring of your emotions. Very, very nice work. ^^

-Howl

[Charles]

This is truly down the rabbit hole, Alice. What else is behind the mirror? Very nice pace and good exposition of emotion. Good format for the subject matter. When this sort of thing happens, let it loose again. You'll please a lot of people.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

you can feel your palpable emotion in this piece... fairly drips off the screen.. and i relate very well to it..

[Aekmy]

This is definitely an amazing write. It doesn't have to have a topic; I believe this is truly great.
I have nothing more to say that hasn't been said.
-Mary

[Tate Morgan]

aLEX FULL OF EMOTION .BUT I DONT HAVE A CLUE WHAT ITS ABOUT
TATE

[CircusNerd]

the internal rhyme's in this piece are phenomenal :) the flow is perfect, and the diction is flawless. fantastic write!!!

-Bhavana

[Alisa_the_fluff_ball]

Babe, I am damn PROUD to call you my fake lesbian wifey. Freakin A-MAZ-ZZ-ING! So deep, pasionate, filled with emotion, that effortlessly flows out of your pen that writes in diamonds. (insert InuYasha quote here)
I love this poem ALMOST as much as I love you!

--Alisa_the_fluff_ball