Left of Limbo

Left of Limbo

A Poem by Alisa Js

I am here again
stuck in the middle of this never ending scene
inside my dream
with you,
always you

finding myself craving
the touch of your tenderness
and
open arms,
wanting to believe this could be
and yet, I wait
for still another day

around this limbo of nothing-ness
knowing if I move one step,
everything changes.
open doors still ajar 
streaming in from outer lives

with you by my side
time would hide among buttercups
lazy days fade as mere memories
slowly rise and we
would skip off against those diatribes
smashing as we laughed...

© 2015 Alisa Js


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You are not alone in this emotion. So many of us are lost in limbo it's amazing we don't just form a support group there and make limbo land more like Disney Land. Ha.
Not to trivialize the depth of love you shared however.
Life is wonderful when we share it with a kindred soul!
Beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Thank you, David for stopping by.

I will be by soon.

Alisa ;-)
I do like the idea of moving just one step will change everything....though in this case I think some movement would be called for. Its that risk free comfort we feel that keeps us in limbo...or at least just this side of it. Enjoyed ( : O )

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your time and comments. I will be by soon.
and once we reach the right of limbo...there is closure in the openness of love and contentment...

and that door, always standing a little bit ajar...just means the other came in from the cold to share the warmth of a beautiful relationship....

exquisite poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob for stopping by and for your comments. I will be by soon.

Alisa💫
I really enjoyed the gentleness of this poem. The last two stanzas really reached out to me.

"open doors still ajar
streaming in from outer lives"

*Bravo* That was simply beautiful!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Thank you, AS, for your time and comments. I will be by soon!

Alisa💫
The never ending yearning rips at emotions. Nicely phrased to affect the reader. I love writing that thumps you in the soul :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Thank you, David

I will be by soon,

Alisa💫
Your words sweet, gentle and kind.
"with you by my side
time would hide among buttercups
lazy days fade as mere memories
slowly rise and we
would skip off against those diatribes
smashing as we laughed..."
I like the use of the word. Buttercups. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ah, unrequited love... I know the feeling!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Aloha Tomas,

Thank you for your time and comments. I will be by soon.

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Aloha Alisa :)

your writing here; describing a purgatory of yearning and deep emotion.
The encapsulation - the 'snow-globe' in which the speaker finds themselves can only become toxic if fresh air via those open doors isn't allowed in.
Change is the only constant.
The whimsy toward the end relieves some of the tension.
Tis excellent


Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Aloha ANTO,

Thank you, kind sir, it is always a pleasure reading your thoughts.
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First of all, I am a sucker for surrealism, often dwelling between the whimsical and a deeper truth. Somehow, it gives a power which strict realism fails to capture, as is the case here; delving within more than a moment, but also uncertain futures, as the two eddy within one vague yet cohesive impression. I particularly enjoyed the first stanza, as I feel that its cadence is the most to my liking, the way the lines shift abruptly, with added repetition--it leaves a strong impact. I also find myself wondering about the diatribes; were they between us (with 'you'), in a separate future? Only thing I noticed 'off' in this is nothingness should just be one word; but considering your usage of diatribes... perhaps the hyphen was added deliberately to give an added impression of vagueness?

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Aloha NE,

I am impressed with your comment and most perceptive thoughts.

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~~ this is a beautiful piece of poetry, alisa... ~~ for me, it's about moments we must experience in order to travel through our lives... so that we may ultimately unravel... and be the individuals we are meant to be... especially emotionally... ~~ i like that you experience every nuance (good and bad and happy and sad and the bittersweet) and share that so skillfully with your readers...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alisa Js

8 Years Ago

Hello serah,

Thank you for your comments, I appreciate them so. Yes, our life journey.. read more
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8 Years Ago

~~ you're very welcome, alisa... and you're right... once we're moved by someone, it's impossible to.. read more

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