Truth

One can talk about the truth, or live it. The former is more profitable, more respected and rewarded by the world. The latter is usually a quiet, unassuming affair.

The gardener worked quietly 

Among the flowers, bending low, 

Face almost touching the earth, 

Pulling up weeds with hands as 

Rough as tree bark, face tranquil, 

Undisturbed as the summer sea 

What a blessing to be so alone and 

Unnoticed, forgotten by the world 

But so alive, surrounded by speechless, 

Vital beauty 

I loosened my tie 

A dead man’s noose 

I unbuttoned my white shirt 

A dead man’s shroud 

I felt envy and shame 

Seeing a life that seemed 

More sacred, good and honest 

Than standing on a pulpit 

With a mouth full of dead letters 

Talking about Truth

Reviews

[chrysantheranium]

Wow... I'm stunned, Laz. Absolutely beautiful work here!

I love the lines "I loosened my tie / A dead man’s noose / I unbuttoned my white shirt / A dead man’s shroud." Those have to be my favorite here.

It can be so calming and yet so unnerving, seeing someone live in a world that we aim for. It seems all they have to do to live is to exist, and to exist can sometimes be hard on its own, especially seeing that our dreams have already been accomplished through other, simpler means. Everyone is on their own journey, and the difficult truth is that every journey will be difficult in it's own way, and we all find our way to our goals simply by pushing past the envy developed over those who have already made it. It can be inspirational, or it can be infuriating - life is the blank slate and we are the paint, ready to become a masterpiece or just another draft. Great work!

[Laz K.]

Thanks for your review. It is very insightful, and your words really helped me to further understand the experience this poem is based on. Thanks again!

[chrysantheranium]

My pleasure! :)

[MrBaskerville]

I liked this one, my take is that it is about returning to nature. With the tie as a noose representing our time spent at work, forgetting to be amazed by the wonders that surrounds us.

I'm no poetry guy, and that take might be way off, but that's what i got.

[Laz K.]

You're not off at all. Yeah, returning to Nature, to what's natural, sincere and simple - that's what it's about. Thanks for taking the time to review it.