Unwanted

Like captured grass that wilts and fades, the colors being drained.

Like leafless trees, their branches dead and broken.

Like falling snow that doesn't stick, it melts away and is forgotten.

I am the changing weather, the sadness that you find.

I am the grass that loses its life.

I am a tree that's stripped of its leaves.

I am the snow with no place to go, the weather not allowing me to stay.

Like falling rain on a sunny day, a rain that doesn't cease.

Like a stirring storm, loud crashes and bright streaks.

I am the rain that doesn't leave.

I am the storm over the sea, sailors begging me to ease.

I am everything you don't want to see,

I am the storm,

The storm is me.

Author's Note

I don't usually write poetry like this, so I'd really appreciate your thoughts and suggestions. Thank you.

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

I often times feel like this, Abashed, Abused, alone.. I have two spectrum's to myself, The hopeless romantic, and the Psychotic freak. This poem is written very well, Its expressionism is well beyond depth, it pierces the very core of the heart. This is definitely a favorite of mine, and I look forward to reading more from you!

[Kelsey]

Thank you, dear, I really appreciate it. x

[Jordan's Back]

no problem. It was genuinely my pleasure!

[Bumble]

I LOVE this poem! This was brilliant!

[Kelsey]

Wow, thank you! :)

[Taylor]

I totally agree with everyone who said you should write more pieces like this. It was amazing, and I really liked it!

[Kelsey]

Thank you!

[Allycat]

I really love the comparisons you chose in this poem. Its very well written. I really love how you end this piece, its very powerful.
Great job!

[Kelsey]

Thank you!

[Some John]

Well you said that you don't usually write poetry like this... Well you should continue to write exactly like this. It was great. Very descriptive, awesome job!

[Kelsey]

Oh my, thank you so much!

[Anne Timmins]

Very eloquent and beautifully written

[Kelsey]

Thank you, it really means a lot.

[Lily Mae]

I think your amazing.. this captured me from the beginning to the the end.. I could feel the emotions as if it were a mini movie playing in my mind..xo excellent ink..xo

[Kelsey]

Wow, thank you so much. That's exactly what a writer wants to hear when writing something like this, so I really appreciate it. (:

[JuniperPearl]

I feel as though this is one of your more developed, mature pieces. The descriptions and visualizations are spot on. You did just use descriptive words, you used them with razor sharp efficiency. I saw, and felt every line on the screen. I could feel the storm brewing within you. This piece is amazing.

[Kelsey]

That means so much, especially coming from a talented writer such as yourself. Thank you, it really means the world.

[JuniperPearl]

You are so very welcome! ....Thank you as well for such a nice complement.

[J. Viands]

I agree wit this lady

[Kelsey]

Thank you!

[dukovan]

i see your starting to explore your symbiotic nature.
A cool lyrics i always think about lately is.
"I am the wind
I am the trees,
I'm the saving sand.
You speak about me sometimes
but I never understand." by Right away, Great Captain!

[dukovan]

probably the most unique thing you've written btw

[Kelsey]

Wow, thank you so much.

[Steven Cash]

It's really dark and depressing, which is a great thing when written down to show emotions and all.

Great job, Kelsey. Hope you feel better soon

[Kelsey]

Thank you.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

This is such a great piece. I love the references to weather. And it has a great flow to it. I especially love the last lines of this piece, it really brings it all together!
"I am everything you don't want to see,
I am the storm,
The storm is me."

Awesome job!

[Kelsey]

Thank you!