Babylon

Babylon

A Poem by alternative_be
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Poem to be entered in the crazy tongues contest, hence the glossary

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Babylon
 
Two bees try
That is the quest
 
De bitskoemer
Zooming into
The bloom
 
Hook all
Did eek
Nodding
 
To the point
 
The karakol
Is
Open
 
24/7
Angst
 
Eek will
A karakol
 
 
 
Glossary of foreign words, used phonetically in this poem:
Bitskoemer: beach cumber (Antwerp dialect)
Bloom: written bloem in Dutch, means both flower and ... flour.
Hook all: ook al (even) (Dutch)
Eek: ik, meaning I (Dutch)
Nodding: nothing (Antwerp dialect)
Karakol: Turkish, sometimes used to refer to the police station (in some parts of Turkey), in Dutch: an edible snail, sold at street stands or fairs…
Will: Dutch ‘wil’ means ‘want’

© 2008 alternative_be


Author's Note

alternative_be
Please read the glossary, I used some words from my dialect, my native language and more to write a poem that contains English words which sound phonetically English, but have a totally different meaning in the original language

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hahah being Dutch i got a kick out of these dutch words! dutch is such a comical language- definitely not romantic , but also not percussive and severe like German. And indeed- in Babylon the punishment for the tower was the many different languages so no one could understand anyone else lol - ja goed, alles goed, groot mooi.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I love how you used your native language to create this poem. It gives it a beauty and a mystery that makes it very unique. I enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very cool. I love words and their slippery meanings and this poem is a celebration of that. Wonderful!

(By the way, I love the title. Perfect.)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very curious form.

I liked how the words form, and I was staring at the poem in utter confusion.

I used the glossary and found the poem to be more enjoyable.

I would not want to see this poem in English, now that I enjoy its current form and choice of words.

Perhaps you can write more poems in such form, sooner of later, I will be able to speak Dutch as well!

Good piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This really appeals to me! karakol offers great scope for crossed wires! Can you imagine being taken to a snail stall when you really want to report a crime in the Ankara Kebab establishment!

I also am reminded of a time when on a holiday in Nl I raced down a beach on the Zuiderzee and did a spectacular racing dive into ... 3 inches of water.

Also I note your 'beach cumber' which sounds like a relation to the cucumber!

This mix-n-match language contest that you have set in motion is wonderful! Sadly being an Englishman, the only lanugage I know is English! Ach!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cool, but I am sure it will leae a lot going huh? I don't get it. lol

like the intellect behind it.

great job.

l8r g8r
-Tao

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice writing, a poem to reflect a meaning open to interpretation, the wording is written in simplistics
and in itself is easy to understand, as each word is designed to reflect a specific image which seems
the intent of this writing, the meaning struck me as comical, colorful and leaves one blissfully pondering,
i like the care put into the entire concept, strikes me as colorful and creative, thanks for sharing

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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