A NIGHT GLIMPSE

Outside the window, a clear dark night,

I see little jewels shining bright.

Small whitish dots against blackened sky,

Motionless, poised while time slips by.

But where's the cow jumping over the moon

Or the cat with fiddle playing tunes?

And while these thoughts plague my conscience;

Cats, fiddles, cows --- just all nonsense!

Who paints this night black and white?

As now my thoughts are taking flight.

For how they seem to watch over me

All these sparkling eyes that I see,

And as I drift.....drift back to sleep,

They will paint my dreams---- all mine to keep.

Reviews

[ANTO]

Tight rhyming here Andrew - rhyming is rare these days on WC so this is a treat - thanks Lavender for bringing me here. Theres wit and wisdom and I like the thoughts of the thoughts not only entertaining via dreams but also looking over the speaker like a guardian angel. Inventive.
;))

[M.Babu]

This was a splendid piece! Took me on a little stroll down slumber lane!
Rhyme scheme, flow and story was a pleasure to read! Great one!
~M.Babu~

[Mary Helda]

Lovely rhyme and beautiful imagery....Andrew thus us fantastic...I really enjoyed reading it:-)

[andrew mitchell]

thank you mary for your time

[Mary Helda]

you are welcome:-)

[.]

Another brilliant write, Andrew.

Very lyrical, beautiful rhyme, excellent imagery. I believe this is my favourite poem that you have written thus far.
Just very, very, well done.!

[andrew mitchell]

lol that means I'm going downhill lol. This is an old write 15 yrs ago when I first started to write then I stopped and took it up again last year, actually just over a year. I took more care with my writes then lol. Thank you Doodley :)

[.]

Hahaha. Your other writes are very good. There is just something very wonderful about this one. Perhaps you are correct. It does seem very well tended this poem, lovingly nurtured.

[Gee]

Can't believe it was a year ago that I read this.Still love it.

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks Gee I shall return on your ink! I still love your Humpty Dumpty poem lol

[Gee]

Cheers mate...I'm all a dither,daughter playing county cup final (football)this morning against a team affiliated to Reading a pro club.CMON YOU BELLES

[andrew mitchell]

wow....................

[Gee]

Booooooooooooo,they lost.....but had a great day.Morning.

[andrew mitchell]

Shame Gee, still a great day to watch your girl. Give her a hug!

[andrew mitchell]

Martin Crowe 53 died of cancer, Paul Couch a retired footballer hear tattack dead 51 riding a pushbike. Life is short Gee!

[Gee]

Cheers Andrew will do.Result meant more to the parents than them.They've played together for six years and it is more of a social thing for them .Love 'em all to bits...

[andrew mitchell]

I would too, special are they not!!!!

[Gee]

Yep,so far this year have had, two deaths,a heart attack,and my mother who can't decide whether she is going to meet the reaper one minute or entering into the London marathon the next.I've got my own parking space at the hospital.Makes you appreciate what you have,especially good health.

[andrew mitchell]

Its scary Gee!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, who does paint it? some Monet i suppose...who also lives in dreams.

very cool poem like a cool black night...

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Jacob

[ms. barrie]

oh my, this is spectacular! you have an incredible knack {talent}
with incorporating your unique choice of words with
a pleasing rhyme scheme. the imagery {for me}
reminds me of Jim Croce' s "cat's in the cradle"
bravo Sir! favs & 100's

[ms. barrie]

gah I am unable to favourite this at the moment * sad face*

[andrew mitchell]

You are too kind ms barrie. Thank you but I think you are the talented one lol:)

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, Dear friend...I disagree....but
Thank you for your lovely sentiment & for always making
me (everyone) smile

[Ruth]

Beautiful...where do dreams go and when do we stop believing...lovely piece Andrew...beautiful tones :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you so much for your kind words Poppy:)

[V]

Nice one. Sounds different from many other writings by you. I guess that's an older one? I like the nightly pictures you draw within this and how they distinguish from the "mainstream" night descriptions.

[andrew mitchell]

Hi Vanessa yes an earlier write when I wasn't so bold as I am now in my writes but I do like to turn in different directions to keep the reader on edge. So Vanessa have I progressed in the right direction??? lol

[A.marie.speaks]

I'm in love with this piece. Its smart, funny and hopeful. It inspires me to let the universe design it's dreams and feed them to me as I sleep. Beautiful.

[andrew mitchell]

Wow thank you so much dear Poet:):) A lovely review!

[A.marie.speaks]

You're very welcome! :) ✌

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmm well done Rhyming no doubt ...i like it ...not easy to do! i feel blessed by the content as all one has to do to see Creation is especially at night ..to look up ;) glad it ends on a positive note with sweet dreams ... a poem to take to bed at night :)
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you E may the stars shine on you!

[Einstein Noodle]

back at ya Sir!