It Was JUST A Dream

It Was JUST A Dream

A Poem by Amandaaa Caroline (:

Our conversations leave me speechless,
Just because of his voice,
It's the most beautiful sound...
Enough to make angels rejoice.

His breathtaking smile drives me crazy,
All I can do is stare,
And every day at 11:11,
I wish that I could be there..

His arms are always strong and safe,
There nothing can bother me,
They always keep me warm and happy,
Every second of eternity.

My dreams that I wish wouldn't end,
Because of the look in his eyes,
I wish it could be reality,
But I wake up and then realize...

© 2012 Amandaaa Caroline (:


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Beautiful enduring poem. You are getting closer and closer to the "showing" of a poem instead of the telling of a poem; the last line of the first stanza, for example. Very showing. I think once you get used to using metaphors and similes, you will be able to show your feelings more. I like the concept of 11:11 being a time for wishing. I've also heard that it is a very spiritual time, 11 being an angelic number, which would tie it back to the angelic use in the first stanza. Then there is the use of eternity.. again, very spiritual, very angelic.. and I like the abrupt ending.. because isn't reality like that sometimes? very abrupt and shockingly real. Very good poem overall. You are doing so well with your writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Awwww, thank you so much, it really means a lot to hear that(:
Ravyne Hawke

11 Years Ago

You are most welcome Amanda. I am enjoying watching you grow with your poetry.



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This is a great write. You portrayed emptiness well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much(:
 Tasha

11 Years Ago

You're welcome. I loved it.
Awe I really like the emptiness you feel in this. You portray it well, Wonderful write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Grrrrr. You're so unfair :P
Jordan's Back

11 Years Ago

no im not, Its AWESOME and to proove it, Ima send it to all my friends
Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

You're insane :P

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Amandaaa Caroline (:
Amandaaa Caroline (:

757, VA



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