Why?

Why?

A Poem by Amandaaa Caroline (:
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I know this poem is crap. No rhythm, no anything. But it has my feelings. And I'm extremely broken right now, so please don't judge me.

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Why can't I f*****g be,
Good enough for someone?
Why can't I stop being,
Shot in the heart with a gun?

I'm not good enough,
So why did you pretend?
Why did you ever pretend to,
Care more than just a friend?

Why did you use me?
Why did you hurt me?
Why'd you break my heart?
Couldn't you just let me be?

My f*****g heart is trashed,
What I thought was love is gone,
But you don't care the slightest,
To you, it was only ever a con.

All the "I love you"s..
You should've just said,
"I hate your guts,
I want you dead",
That would've been better.

© 2013 Amandaaa Caroline (:


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I am sorry you continue to feel this intense pain! May you heal and find a bit of happiness again! I see you want to close your account. Please don't! It is okay to write of what is bothering one. It is good therapy, and does not always have to mean anything to another. Writing is coping, venting, lots of things for different poets.
Please don't be so very hard on yourself!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Miss Sheila. I'm working on it :/



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Angry and Sad Excellent display of raw emotion

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

6 Years Ago

Thank you.
Hey girl, I'm glad that you let them emotions come out. It's always good to have something to let go of that fury and a poem is the perfect solution.
I do hope that by the time you read this, you are feeling much more relieved.
-Penelope H.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

I honestly am! Hahaha, thanks so much (:
Euro

7 Years Ago

That's good to know! :D
I'm sorry darlin that you've been hurt to that extent :( but, you are not alone in this pain. Just stay strong and rise above it! You're still so young and you've got so much more life in you that you've yet to live! Love, and I mean real live will come to your door when you least expect it to. The idiot that broke your heart will realize how much of an idiot he is, trust me...or he'll experience hearbreak himself one day. You are a beautiful and obviously talented lady. So hold that chin up, and smile even when it hurts...that'll just tick the hate in the world off more ^_~

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Patrick Henry

7 Years Ago

I don't ever like "piggy-backing" off of another's comment, but that was a beautifully written comme.. read more
Serenity Faith

7 Years Ago

Teehee thank you Mark ^_^ I was just telling Amanda honestly that she's a tough yummy cookie that th.. read more
Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Haha, thanks y'all (:
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Pax
quite a release,great infact, don't worry your not alone in this kind of feelings. writing your feelings is a healing process, write those pondering thoughts and i know you'll feel at ease... the thing is broken heart is also a learning process, your young and have a long journey ahead of you... be strong. thanks for sharing and the invite ms. Carol :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Hahah, it's fine, caroline is my middle name :P and yeah, but taking no shortcuts and instead facing.. read more
Pax

7 Years Ago

that's great to hear your feeling better, i see writing really helps... keep penning those thoughts... read more
Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Haha, I definitely will (:
If u ask me I truely think this did have rhythm once again I didn't think it was a poem that made me want to go the other direction(HAHA PICK ONE DIRECTION IF UR A DIRECTIONER).It truely poured out your soul and affections in this and I think thats what makes it special. If he were to read this I'm pretty sure he'd understand that he made the worst mistake in the history of mistakes.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Angelic_Dreamer

7 Years Ago

wow then he is a real jerk!!!:( And ur welcome
Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Yeah, I don't know what to think anymore :/
Angelic_Dreamer

7 Years Ago

well no wonder
Aching in your words... you're such a wondrous, beautiful friend... Please know that you are more than just "good enough." I know the pain of heartache doesn't just go away... I carry scars still... and that makes me ache for you even more. You deserve so much better... May you find countless kind and loving friends to surround you now while you heal... and you will.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Craig. For everything!
An owl on the moon

7 Years Ago

Thank YOU, Amanda for being a true light in this world for all of us...
Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Hahaha, thank you for the same :P I'm not so bright and happy of a light at the moment though :/
Hug. I am sorry that your heart is hurting like it is. I will be sending a little bit of extra love your way.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you Ahmad.
I am sorry you continue to feel this intense pain! May you heal and find a bit of happiness again! I see you want to close your account. Please don't! It is okay to write of what is bothering one. It is good therapy, and does not always have to mean anything to another. Writing is coping, venting, lots of things for different poets.
Please don't be so very hard on yourself!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Miss Sheila. I'm working on it :/
I love it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you Brittany.
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You can obviously write your feelings down and turn it into words... I see that your only 13 and that's impressive. But what you have written reeks of cliché heartbreak grumbles from days long grown old. Perhaps if you tired to disguise the truth behind the story and tried to express your feelings through another story you would come up with a much more readable poem. Keep it up, hope your hear heels soon.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

I couldn't even see through the tears when I was writing this, let alone worry about what the poem w.. read more

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