Tell Me

Tell Me

A Poem by Amandaaa Caroline (:
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More raw emotions..

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Promised myself I wouldn't,
For him, I won't cry,
I thought I could be strong,
But here, on the floor... I lie.

I can't stop myself,
I have to calm down somehow,
I need to stop being weak,
I need to stop, right now.

All the shaky actions,
Insecurity is shining through,
The littlest things set me off,
Because I'm thinking of you.

I won't ever have closure,
'Til I know what I did wrong,
I can't stop the tears,
And I can't yet move on.

Something inside of me,
Has to know what I did...
Tell me what I did wrong,
Then of me, you may be rid.

I want to move on,
To find a real, loving guy,
Who loves me, only me,
And doesn't tell lie after lie.

Yes, tears fall down my face,
But not because I miss you.
Simply because, I never could see,
That your love for me wasn't true.

© 2013 Amandaaa Caroline (:


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Featured Review

This poem is really good! It's packed with raw emotions.
My word of advice: Everything will be alright in the end! I promise you it probably wasn't your fault. If you need anyone to vent out your feeling you can message me or just write more well-written poems. Whatever suits you. :)
100/100

-Invisible Girl :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Hahaha, thank you, invisible girl (:
The Invisible Girl

7 Years Ago

You're welcome! :D



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So many poems are like pain on a page...I finally found one that made ME feel "something". After all isn't that why we write? To give another an emotional response to our work...Sad, relatable, honest! Great job!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Sounds like how I felt after my wife asked for a divorce years ago. To this day I never knew what happened and I think it is why I keep others at a distance.

Sorry for the rant... Nicely written.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

6 Years Ago

You don't have to apologize for the rant. I'm glad you could relate to my poem, but I'm sorry that i.. read more
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

6 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Deeply Sorrowful and dark. Intence.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much
This is beautiful. I enjoyed it a lot, and I know the feelings, it hurts, but we learn to move on.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

6 Years Ago

Sorry for the delayed reply! I just now got back onto my account. Thank you so much for this! And ye.. read more
Owch. Again you manage to get your emotions across and evoke them in the reader. I like it. Good job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

6 Years Ago

Once again, I'm sorry for my delayed reply. Thank you so much for your reviews, I appreciate them gr.. read more
love it! straight from the heart and plain and simple. keep writing writing :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

6 Years Ago

Sorry for delayed replies! I've only just gotten back onto the site. Anyways, thank you so much!
Package is new i think, it's a new flash, very well written.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you (:
You go Amandaaa. You go girl : )

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Hahaha, thanks Casanova (:
this is magnificent! its really good. one question, i assume it is but, is this a personal struggle? i would love to know how this came to be. it seems like a good subject matter for you to write about. the wording i REALLY loved. you're a good writer; good with poetry. (:

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Yes, this is a personal struggle. Something I was going through with tears in my eyes the day I wrot.. read more
Quiet Child

7 Years Ago

your welcome(:
Emotions reign in this Piece.... and it's good to read with:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you!

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Amandaaa Caroline (:

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