The baby conundrum

The baby conundrum

A Poem by amarlaksh
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just read on

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Ere a torrent of simpers
filthy,
a scab sat in chair small.
Shabby clothes, with limbs muddy,
a humid face and a yanky yawl.
With murderous eyes now and then.
Snared his pupil all around.
They adore, smile , and even bend,
to see him more, got to ground.
They say him cute and beautiful.
but oh i knew, and knew good!
What a waste he was, really ungraceful.
And where he stood!
To my brain if asked by,
should be sent with his age?
Certainly to somewhere far by,
to some zoo, circus or a cage.
And then we would be free
of this wicked trotter,
but what of me!
'play with uncle,boy' uttered his mother!
---- amar laksh

© 2012 amarlaksh


Author's Note

amarlaksh
this is my first one,hence please ignore my grammar if possible and surely do comment on it please!!!!!

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Nice one ......this is something thrilling....A new GoodRead of mine

Posted 10 Years Ago


A little too dark for me, but exaggeration is never outdated in poetry! :D I liked reading this, except for the line "snared his pupil all around". It just doesn't seem right. Other than that, well written and gets your point across.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Dark overtures in this read, could go a number of places with it, muchly enjoyed your aphotic view here!

Posted 10 Years Ago


amarlaksh

10 Years Ago

Dark it is ... thanks for your detailed review Frieda :)
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

My pleasure amarlaksh :-)
I'm liking your style and poems...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


amarlaksh

10 Years Ago

Thank u so much Sami, i hope you would continue to like 'em :)
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

I will...You are welcome...:)
Amar.... haha :D
Dark , Grasping and funny ..
I bet some toddler was on your nerves when you wrote it! :P

Posted 10 Years Ago


fine

Posted 11 Years Ago


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TK
Interesting poem! Dark and intriguing. Keep up the good work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Well that's a different perspective!! o.O
Very good work! Intriguing piece!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Admire this

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very dark and griping :} You're very talented. I really like the lines

To my brain if asked by,
should be sent with his age?
Certainly to somewhere far by,
to some zoo, circus or a cage.

Amazing write!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on August 20, 2012
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amarlaksh

Agra, Atheist, India



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