Any body there ?

Any body there ?

A Story by Ambereen
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A short story I entered for a contest .

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I had just entered my first apartment. The perfect one for me sea facing ,cozy Just right I should say.

I began settling things in the bedroom first. When I realized there was an unfurnished portion of the wall. Never noticed it before. The unpainted corner had something eerie about it. An instinct told me to place my ears on the wall. What I heard made me skip a heartbeat.” Tick Tock tick Tock “I could hear the watch right behind it. Was there somebody there?  A cadaver ! Oh NO!!

© 2013 Ambereen


Author's Note

Ambereen
Entered this for a contest . Tell me how it is ? will write a continuation later .

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i would like a longer one...but it is good and the cadaver thing is indeed the best one:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


This was a good story! Very suspenseful towards the end! I hope you continue with this and make it longer :)

~Erinne

Posted 8 Years Ago


You did very well. A complete tale in so few words. Nice feel of mystery and I like the surprise ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


oh greatly written...this small piece was great really...notify me when you add second chapter.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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It is a piece in itself and does not need a continuation as it has a nice open ending, leaving the reader to make a decision. Great atmosphere created.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Em
I like this and even though its short and simple it still had me wanting to read. It'd be cool if you made something longer out of it now.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ok... I guess the contest was to keep it very short...
I'll give this a pass but not a "loved it" for me.


Posted 8 Years Ago


Sounded like Indian actor Jackie Shroff movie 100 days but in your own creative writing style.
Smallest short story i ever read and therefore interesting as the climax is there to see and without turning pages or scrolling down.
Thanks



Posted 8 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

8 Years Ago

Bollywood movies are the ones that keep up our spirits be it in sad, bad or good times.
Your M.. read more
Ambereen

8 Years Ago

Lol... I am sure its goiing to be super hit ... Housefull and all ... And dont forget the sequel ala.. read more
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

8 Years Ago

Koiiii mill gayaaa....jadoooooooooooooooooooooo
Scary! Hahaha! I hope I don't get to see something like that in our house!

Posted 8 Years Ago


...I believe...=)

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on February 1, 2013
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Tags: Suspense, dead body, apartment, crime

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Ambereen
Ambereen

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A Novice to poetry and a Chartered Accountant by profession . Recently i Stumbled on the fact that i could write a few lines with ease . So here i am, i would love all suggestions and reviews from .. more..

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