Pathetic

 

She wants the truth, no infidelities;
A serrated girl, once whole:
She craves your attention, your eyes.
Jealousy and despair fills empty spaces;
And she can't decipher from your words.

Longing for lust, and hoping for romance,
It kills the soul and smashes the heart.
She doesn't mean to make you irate,
Make you think, or die inside.
She just wants you to forget the past,
Try to accept her instead, a realization
She can't herself start to fill again.


It's only a matter of long, sweet months,
Before she tosses you back into the currents,
'You were a good waste of salt, a grandeur moment.'
And you will be forgotten

Your mind needs alterations, surely you know.
Those thoughts are a sour dismay,
You are putting too much into thought,
And not barely enough into heart,
into what matters: present.
A sunset that has yet to crawl from behind the waves.
Time isn't of the essence, nor of the moment,
It's an errant mistake that poisons the body.

Breathe in, breathe out, don't breathe at all.
Patience is thinning, and headaches are forming:
You're the center of all that is to be.
She is waiting for the moment when the words
Escape your bittersweet lips again:
"You're beautiful, and I am lucky."

'You're pathetic and I am through.'

Reviews

[HL Williams]

Really enjoyed! Nice writing

[The Changing of the gua..]

Ambur you got some words... talented with a capital T lol anyways i was reading alot of your thoughts and girl, you are good! I've been reading alot of peoples poems on here and man wow its amazing how one mind can express itself in so may ways. I feel like a needle in a hay stack here.. everybody here on this site is good, excellent.. actually it's motivating.. But i wanna thank you for your comment. I dont know if you got my e-mail yet but some of your words are far beyond my equal intelligence educate me "smiles" C.Pinson

[Shae]

I like the ending! This is a really good poem! Keep writing!

[Sean M. Addams]

very enjoyable piece... love the flow and imagery in this.... my fav lines are ............Breathe in, breathe out, don't breathe at all.
Patience is thinning, and headachs are forming:
You're the center of all that is to be.
She is waiting for the moment when the words
Escape your bittersweet lips again:
"You're beautiful, and I am lucky."

'You're pathetic and I am through.'........great job on this one...

[rickROSS]

This is good. I liked it. There are some grammar errors to say the least but overall i thought it was good, yet sad.