love chronicles of symptomatic empathy

collecting my thoughts

The following may or may not be based on true events*

Lies under the moon

"Look at the moon, isn't it beautiful," she said.
His deep brown eyes stole her breath.
He held her.
He said,"not as beautiful as you."
Then he slit her open, stem to stern, took out her heart, and ate it.

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he really loved her

"I love you," he said,
"but not enough to stop being me."
and then, he set her free.

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"Me, myself and you, I will always be true" (except when I take your best friend upstairs)

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Bruised yellow and charred by dragon's breath

"I am nothing without you ...
"I will marry you BURY you, someday," he said.

and he almost did ...

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Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

dripping with the irony of "nothing can stop me now, cause I don't care anymore" as well as the subtle(?) blood oozing from the eaten heart... KL, these lines are deadly "I love you/ but not enough to stop being me"... in my opinion, there is no need to be defensive about this poem, in some ways I like is more than your "tamer" one, which I like very much.... its hard to say one is better than the other (as the reader), you seem to think so though...each has its puropse so to speak, each paint a vivid picture of then same scene but from different angles and each is necessary to be written. each is also well written in a style/format that enhances the poem itself.. I enjoy your writing my friend...

[Lyn Anderson]

Truth be told, I like them equally, but for different reasons. I just noticed others are more comfortable with the other, which makes sense. I have a keen sense of the macabre and always have, and in some ways lean toward this one because of it. Thank you very much, all a writer can ever ask is that their work be enjoyed.

[Anne Timmins]

this is just wonderfully written.I can feel your heart all over this piece. Bravo

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks I appreciate it.

[Pryde Foltz]

Oh Wow … here's a piece of poetic abstraction that take the reader for an emotional ride. I have to say, KL, this vignette style really, really works for you:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks a lot. It is how I always wrote on paper and only recently started translating to computer.

[Frieda P]

I read the first and said, alrighty then, this is gonna be fun....gotta laugh at 'take your best friend upstairs', although it ain't one bit funny...that dragon breath will get you each and every time...clever stuff.
It has a good 'deadbeat', I could dance on it... ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah I wrote this before the tame one.

[Matching Socks]

Yeah, this one is a tad darker than the last I read. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Just a tad. Notice the titles are kinda opposite. This is what it has been the other is the anti-my life.