the vulture that is you

verbal vomit on a subject that rears its ugly head once in a while look away if you don't like it

drain circling
with the dregs
of your soul
trailing behind
snuffling out scraps
putrefying remains
of what we were ...


it won't change a thing.

if you are here
or you are there
nothing will bring
the stinking
rotting carcass
that was us
back to life.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Oi, now that's what I'm talking about...your voice seethes & spits when you write these, there's steam coming off the page....

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah, I know. The words blurring ain't too shabby either. If you are into that sort of vitriol, that is ..:)

[Frieda P]

You know I am...leave the sappy stuff to the romantics. ;)

[Bright Ocean Star]

wow...KL. You can't get more clarity than this. Gutteral, very descriptive, and viscerally awesome write.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, as xsilver pointed out, dead is dead, not mostly dead.:)

[icelandicblue]

Some things die harder than others and there is no need for necromancy. Brutally honest poem you've written here.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, I appreciate it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You can not go backwards in a relationship, once you have killed it best to bury what remains have a memorial for the good it brought and move forward. I straight to the point rant, my favorite kind.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, thanks very much.

[m.s.early]

You present a difference between a "little dead" and "very dead". A little dead, I suppose, could be resuscitated, but very dead, is permanent with no chance of breathing ever again.

Well put

[Lyn Anderson]

Good thinking, like in princess bride, mostly dead or all dead

[Lydia Shutter]

Once it's over, it's over. The genie can not go back into the bottle. Great choice of words, KL. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you as always

[kublakhan27]

Powerful and obviously very sad on more than one level...much more than 'verbal vomit'...I'm with Pryde, the 'carcass' concept is perfect.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I appreciate itam

[Pryde Foltz]

if you are here
or you are there
nothing will bring
the stinking
rotting carcass
that was us
back to life.

Love … love … love the concept and the message of this one. "it's dead so quite picking over the carcass" Loved.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, I appreciate it.

[NoelHC]

Well stated, I like the format, with the "it won't change a thing" breaking the two verses into separate statements.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I appreciate it, just made it to page 78 of my work. I looked back to the very first poem I posted on here. Maybe I should stop on my one year anniversary and go back to the beginning ...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha that old chestnut! Affirmation of your position told in vitriolic verse!

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah, the old chestnut rolled into town and rumours are he is here to stay.