the truth in words

A "Pairing Up" collaboration with Confuzzled Kid

I told her I loved her,
and she turned it into hate.

I complimented her colour,
she said it was something she ate.

I didn't want to hurt her,
so I asked her to contemplate:

It never sounds genuine,

Forced with a hidden agenda 

Are you honest ? 

Are you fair? 

Is your love true? 

l know you're tired of this 

And l hate to cause a stir

Calm my fears

Are your words true?

What ever happened to her

    to make her waffle and vacillate?

    It's now or never,
    I just can't wait,

    I will give her forever,
    and she'll give me too little too late.

Author's Note

captcha HIDER

Reviews

[J. K. Beach]

Annother offering I missed while away. This is an amazing collab! Chicken/egg? Poem/video or visa versa? Doesn't matter... result stands on it's own. Too little too late happens far to often...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. Pairing up with someone to create is an interesting process.

[MomzillaNC]

An interesting dialogue… I like the way you both show how difficult it is to trust again. And, how every new love has to stand in the glare of mistaken past loves. It's so unjust that an honest heart must defend against the dishonesty of someone else's betrayals. But, the sad truth is, human nature, once trust is broken, finds it a Herculean task to learn to trust again; and, the onus of teaching someone betrayed to trust again falls on the next person.

Sigh… I'm not saying all this very well. Sorry.

[Lyn Anderson]

No, thank you. I appreciate it.

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[NoelHC]

I had almost forgotten about this project you were doing. Overall it turned out well, it is often difficult to mesh two writers, but this one achieved that.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. It was a challenge. It's an interesting group.

[Lizardo]

''Is your love true?
l know you're tired of this
And l hate to cause a stir
Calm my fears''
I love this poem so much, like you have no Idea how much I enjoyed it
It really speaks the truth about love.
"she turned it into hate" The title says it all... The truth in words
Awesome poem!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I am sure Confuzzled Kid appreciates as well.

[Lizardo]

You're welcome!

[ConfuzzledKidd]

I do appreciate it!

[h d e rushin]

it's true KL, there are no comparisons in nature to the discussions you will have with
any thing of the female species. My female cat runs from my menstruating cousin. Because
she knows full well that any readjustment of the uterus to the nonpregnant state will result in
ideological actions to be feared. Good luck my friend.

dana

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. This is a collaboration, and as such not autobiographical except in the broadest sense of human experience.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I loved this so much. I like how it rhymes in all the lines except when i spoken word. It's a very interesting and novel kind of writing form; it felt refreshing! And of course the way you cover the theme of unrequited love or love woken up too late is magical.

My favorite lines:
"I told her I loved her,
and she turned it into hate."

"I complimented her colour,
she said it was something she ate."

"I will give her forever,
and she'll give me too little too late."

You are very wise to have chosen to ask her patiently what is up with her instead of begging her to love you or forcing it upon her. True love is patient. But loving oneself is likewise important. You are also wise to have chosen not to wait forever, knowing that in the end you'll be giving it all...but she will give you very little.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. This is a collaboration and worked out as such. The she in the poem is someone we dreamed up together.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

It is wonderful to see a work of two working so well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like this...and you made me think of Hamlet with Ophelia---"are you honest? are you fair?"

"you have one face and you paint yourself another...i will give thee a plague for a dowry" (shakespeare)

often the other comes around too little too late.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I appreciate it. I like the concept of being paired with someone at random to create. It stretches the imagination and the willingness to cooperate.

[Chris]

Some thought-full moments between the lines here.

[Lyn Anderson]

Interesting you should pick this one. Nice to see you.:)

[Chris]

that kinda morning... good "seeing" you as well