not what you thought but then again maybe

just read it and see.

if I wanted
a picket fence,
I'd call a
carpenter.

if I wanted
a man to fix me,
I'd call a
doctor.

if I wanted
dollars and cents,
I'd call a
banker.

if I wanted
something else,

I'd come to you
on bended knee

for more than
I do.

you might be
perfectly
suited
for all that.

but that's not
why you are
suited
to me.

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open up
say ahhh
open your
heart
as wide
as your
eyes
are blue
as wide
as your
mind
lets you
there is
nothing
I say
or do
that
isn't
true
to you.

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i don't ever
want you
to feel
that you
aren't
the one.

you are ...

you're
 just not
what you
thought
the one
would be.

Author's Note

Reviews

[. serah .]

-- i'm not much of a critic... -- i usually relay how i experienced a poem to the poet... -- and i have to say that the message of this poem is absolutely astounding... -- i relate to it intensely... and maybe i'm not reading it as intended but i'm deriving a lot of meaning from it... -- what this poem articulates for me is the fact that we may have a certain perception of the kind of person our partner would be happiest with... and then sometimes we go into a downward negative spiral thinking that we're not good enough when compared with that perception... and this poem is the voice of a partner who is gently telling us that our perception is wrong and so we are not just good enough for our partner... but "the one"...

-- there is a sea of understanding, love, sensitivity and intelligence in this piece... from where i'm lookin' at it... and i appreciate that immensely... -- this is excellent work... very giving and very compassionate in its nature...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for the very thoughtful and sensitive review, and that is pretty much exactly the message of this piece. Thank you for taking the time.

[. serah .]

-- you're very welcome... and i'm glad i read this piece as intended...

[highonwords]

you cast out all the trappings of love and get down to business - which is two hearts beating as one - accepting and understanding one another

steph

[Lyn Anderson]

thanks for the comments and the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have a lot of problems getting my heart to open up enough to say "aahhh"
too often i got the strep throat with love---

these are good...and i especially like the first one....

all the things you think i want...not so...all i want is you and your love...

nicely expressed...carpenters, doctors and bankers do their thing...

but lovers do something else...they fix the heart...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you sir, I appreciate it. This one turned out to be better than I thought, much like the love that inspires it.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

This piece is very nice and very visually attractive. But the first three stanzas, as well as the last one were so profound to me.

you're
just not
what you
thought
the one
would be.

This is so amazing and I can really relate.
Great job.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much for the compliment and the review. It is a style of mine I have honed here at the Cafe' -- groupings of related poems that create one whole. I used to separate them from each other, but now keep them together, as they really are all one thought.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Your'e welcome. Keep up the good work.

[Lydia Shutter]

Fantastic...you're just not what you thought the one would be. Only you know who is right for you....and even if it seems you are making the wrong choice, it is yours to make. Very romantic write, KL. I liked it. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Ah, thank you -- just my thoughts -- when you've been there, done that, you often second guess yourself, but your first feelings remain on top.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Being independent doesn't mean we don't need someone else... it is great when someone can stand on there own but also lean on someone else.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, it is. Sometimes that someone needs reminding that they special just for who they are and not for what they think they should be.

[Caradoc]

This made me smile, especially the latter third. Poetry like this makes me almost believe in romance and true love again.

Nicely done.

-Cara

[Lyn Anderson]

Almost? Ahh, you are much too young to not still believe. Thank you for stopping in and reviewing.

[Caradoc]

You're always welcome. :) I may be young yet, but my soul is old and my heart has felt a great deal of pain from love lost and betrayed. Before that I was leaning towards cynicism and now after, well, I don't believe in fairy tales anymore.

[Lyn Anderson]

I know all about no fairytales. My solid farm boy is as real as a man gets. :)