my heart whispers abandon

love in all its fickleness

abandon

you leave me
on the edge
of ecstasy --
my only
purchase,
teeth on
the tender bits
of your ear --

abandon,
isn't always
a bad thing.

as long
as it feels
like this,
no sense to
ponder
if goodbye
lies behind
your kiss ...

when minutes cease to exist
and hours blend into years --
what could be better than this?

the truth

look in my eyes
and realize
what is a leap for you
isn't a step for me --
I don't need
to lead you
to a particular
destination,
I just need you
to come with me
to the station.

Author's Note

Reviews

[iamshadowine]

i really like this stanza

"when minutes cease to exist
and hours blend into years --
what could be better than this?"

amazingly written poem! loved the flow of the poem! really nicely composed! keep writing

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for stopping in and your review.

[Kesha]

My absolute favorite line;

"when minutes cease to exist"

I love the way everything flows oh so perfectly. Wonderful job, I love how you penned it, it almost has a sad tone to it, laced with confidence although.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for picking up on that. Thank you for the review.

[Kesha]

You are welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that line is so cool..."i just need you to come with me to the station"

these always pack such a punch.... your short sets....

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much. I do really like the finale to this one.:)

[LastMonth]

I really like the format.
The way it is written and spaced, that is.

I don't pretain to know the first thing about poetry.
It's probably not my favorite way of writing, or recieving content.

Still, one can't ignore the powerful messege in yours.
I enjoyed it, which is not to be taken for granted since I usually sulk at poetry in it's mainstream form.

Thank you for a lovely poem.

[Lyn Anderson]

Well, thank you, I take that as a compliment. I write as I feel, and I often write in sequential themes and string them together as one poem. I have always written that way, but learned that format through positive feedback writing here. I have short stories as well, though most of them are of a "mature" nature. I will be sure to check you out.

[LastMonth]

Oh, I love short stories.
I really do.
Anything in particular you recommend/want reviewed first?

[Lyn Anderson]

I shall look, and email.

[V]

Nice message and lovely use of words. I think I preferred the last part, just going somewhere without knowledge of the destination, trusting each other, though it reads nicely in general.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, I am partial to that as well. :) Always nice to see you, and I see you are very busy writing. Good for the soul sometimes.:)

[V]

Definitely. I've been pretty inspired lately.

[Matching Socks]

Teeth on the tender bits of the ear... Oh yeah, that's very nice!
But the ending was the hook for me. As if to say "I don't know where I'm taking you because I don't know where I'm going but come with for the ride - or the journey.

[Lyn Anderson]

Absolutely. I am glad it's clear where I was going with that ...

[Usman Muhammad]

A very beautiful poem.
I really liked the ending as it explained the whole poem in i line only.
Very well written.

[Lyn Anderson]

I thank you for stopping in and your review.