take only as directed

a senryu collective - liberties with the intent, but not the form 5-7-5;3-5-3;5-7-5

your eyes averted
say more than you want them to
less than I needed

when I run
I feel it inside
there I hide.

enteric coating
affords no real protection
took your bitter pill.

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

these senryu also reminded me musically of Morissette's "Jagged Little Pill"... "you live you learn" and perhaps we will one day learn to live without enduring the harsh pills of love... nice senryu KL

redzone

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah I never thought of that. Live and learn for sure. Thank you for the review. :) hugs

[V]

I like the sort of lightness and breezy attitude with a notion of bitterness, at least that's how it came across to my mind. The first one on the left reads best to me.

[Lyn Anderson]

Exactly how I intended. Thank you.

[V]

You're welcome.

[Matching Socks]

I chuckled at nevill's swallow you whole.. :)
What can I say? I understand the averted eyes, the pill, and most of all running to the safe place I can hide, inside.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah, he is a funny dude. We have had a good rapport since I first came here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the second one...running in place, and into that place...

the first one...ah yes, the eyes tell all...no matter how the lips form words.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, I appreciate the look-see. I like the senryu. It works well with my penchant for counting.

[Neville]

Each a rare delight
and very true
a bitter pill indeed..........................................................................
Now let me swallow you 10/10

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you sir, delighted to see you. Feels like it's been a while.

[Neville]

Ha KLG, I once was lust but now I'm fond........x