My passion bears careful scrutiny

scrutinised passion -- not sure what that means

Rooted in Reality

People want to believe

that love is magical

and happens upon us

Unexpected --

like floods, fires,

and earthquakes ...

 

That's not the way

it has to be.

I choose love

rooted in reality.

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symmetrical equation

There is a certain symmetry

Between the you that is you

And the me that is me.

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 you say like it's a bad thing

"Mach·i·a·vel·li·an",

she called me.

as if thinking

through love

is selfish,

and falling headlong

without a plan,

is not.

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 passionate scrutiny

I am prone to over analysis

this is true,

it's just something

I always do.

but after a careful

examination

of everything

that is you and me

I do conclude

my passion

bears careful scrutiny.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Perhaps, what that person doesn't realize is that love... true love.. commitment...deserve a bit of thought. Maybe, because I have lived through some ill thought out relationships and seen and felt the damage, I am too scrutinizing myself. Sometimes, that has gotten in the way, but usually not. When my heart knows, as you say, the passion will bear scrutiny. Wonderful message and love the way you put it all together on the page.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much. I am not sure why it irked me so much -- probably the messenger who called me Machiavellian -- I am so far from that. And the scrutiny part, that was just bonus from a review. I thought it clever and strange to have my Heart Whispers Abandon poem described as "scrutinised passion" -- but if the shoe fits, wear it, and wear it with style.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Well, if that review sparked this then you succeeded in flipping it over!

[barleygirl]

Love! Love! Love! This is a great collection of perfectly connected dots. I mean, they don't go together like a puzzle, but with just enuf proximity to keep the mind wandering in one direction like a curvy stream. Your description of being analytical & contemplative is something I can really relate to. I spent the first half of my life being reactive, now I find I'm very adverse to the very things you're eschewing here in a gentle, non-judgmental way. Nice job & thanks for sharing. I can feel more of your intensity in this collection.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I am not one to be ruled by emotion. Thanks for understanding and remarking on this piece.

[redzone]

while there may be a chaotic quality to love, the heart and soul of love is a "symmetrical equation" and it is through this symmetry, that love becomes a very wild and crazy affair, in other words, very passionate... nicely and passionately done KL..

I do not do this often, but I would like to make a bit of a suggestion, do you want to pause the flow by using a comma at the end of "through love"?? it mostly is just me, but I like the smoothness as you read without the comma....

in reading your poem, I was wondering how much being hurt in a previous relationship is also involved in over thinking... I think we should always understand the necessity for symmetry (the "you of you" and the "me of me"), the reality as you put it, while allowing for just plain reaction to their presence at times... it takes some real mutual respect and equality for this to happen I think... anyway, perhaps I am "over thinking" your poem KL, as it is a very good one!! thanks for sharing it...

redzone

[Lyn Anderson]

Most definitely over-thinking comes from both my personality and my experience. As for the through, yes, I do believe I should take out the comma.

[Jon Roggie]

You simply write. You share emotions. Music and videos are a garnish. Nice reaction.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much. I appreciate it. Yep, from fingers to page, and then dress it up a little.:)

[Jon Roggie]

Despite the brevity, I think you are an honest writer. Call it like I see it.

[Lyn Anderson]

And you call it accurately. I cannot write well without letting me show through, even if the subject matter is not about me, it must move me. I used to hate contrived projects in school that forced a person to write on something they were not interested in. That said, I never read King Soloman's Mines, but I got A+ on the paper I b'sd my way through.

[Jon Roggie]

I hate to say it, but I did the same thing for a term paper. I had about 60 notecards, and turned them into 8 pages of writing.

[Lyn Anderson]

tee hee, you and I seem to have a lot in common.

[Kesha]

I love your style KL it's very unique. I quite enjoyed this piece of yours. Thank you very much for sharing, nicely written.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, I am glad my "style" is appreciated -- I have always written this way, but only recently in the past few years have kept the related poems together instead of taking them apart.

[Kesha]

Of course it is, you are a wonderful writer. And that's good :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Interesting poem! I really like the way it was composed!

My fave part was:
you say like it's a bad thing

"Mach·i·a·vel·li·an",
she called me.
as if thinking
through love,
is selfish,
and falling headlong
without a plan
is not.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for the review.

[Matching Socks]

I'm not really sure I understand what 'scrutinized passion' means or in what context he delivered this.
I'm sure it was good though. Don't we all scrutinize, analyze way overthink things when it comes to love?
No? What!? Anyhow, absolutely enjoyed this.

[Lyn Anderson]

I didn't really know what the heck he meant either, that's why I had to analyse it! Canadian girl I use my Z's sometimes too. Been thinking about Gord Downie. Such a beautiful mind.

[Matching Socks]

Yes. Very sad. I will miss him. :(

[Einstein Noodle]

what a tempting nibble you are ...closing verse is so finely tweeked ...i am too old to be in the scope of this speaker but not so old i can not fly with fanciful dreams ... really like every word of this one girl! the honesty blossoms and bleeds at the same time .. great job! thanks for sharing!
E.
ps Symmetrical equation is so scientifically divine ..brilliant i say ..brilliant!! :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Delighted you should say so, though with me, most writing is very untweaked. Only the formatting and music takes time. I was pleased with this one and inspired by a review, as so often is the case. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

perhaps i would say it better as .....finely sparked .. subtle sexuality ... brings to mind ...well...i would so happily scrutinize your speaker with care and due diligence ... :)