Spit, or Swallow?

Spit, or Swallow?

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
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ten words I give contest tourist, grind, perforate, aquarium, abridge, frame, serve, score, effort, lease

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Her photo tucked neatly

In a wooden frame,

It took a monumental effort,

For him to just get out of bed.

Searching for a way to abridge

whatever phase of grief he had reached


How many days had it been?

According to the experts,

He should be someplace

Different by now.

Bits of coffee,

Sticking in his teeth.

Spit or Swallow?


I told her not to buy the fine grind.

Was God up there, somewhere,

Keeping score?


He pulled high his knee socks,

Slipped into his birkenstocks.

His need to perforate holes

In the wall of grief around him

Would serve as an impetus

To renew the lease

On the life he once knew.


She loved the aquarium,

Her hair was strawberry,

In colour, and scent.


Random thoughts floating

To the surface

As he wandered the streets.

Hopelessly lost,

A tourist,

on the outside

of his broken heart.



© 2017 Lyn Anderson


Author's Note

Lyn Anderson
use the following words in a poem -- for the ten words I give contest
tourist, grind, perforate, aquarium, abridge, frame, serve, score, effort, lease


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Posted 1 Year Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

What? Thank you I guess?
Kudos on the write, conception and metaphors. This is a poem you want to read more and more, the only problem it runs out of lines.

Regards,
Al

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much. This is my favourite I wrote for this particular challenge.
Alfred Kukitz

4 Years Ago

Love those lips! Kiss kiss!
"a tourist on the outside of his own heart" is SO GOOD! Very ingenuitive use of the words you had to work with

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks again. I love these word challenges.
Clever use of allotted words.
Novel and entertaining notions.
Snappy last three lines complete an outstanding read!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping in. I appreciate you taking the time to leave your thoughts.
one of my favorites written by you, it has a certain edge that wows, that's really your niche, forming words around words provided, excellent work.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks, funny, I find it's one of my faves too - yes - a story around a set of words does work for m.. read more
Corset

4 Years Ago

not easy for a lot of folks, nice work.
I'm probably way off base with my intepretation. I keep thinking of Scott Walkers songs. But aside from that I find the word usage here simply superb and extremly evocative.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Not knowing who Scott Walker is, I couldn't tell you. This is a poem of grief and loss, Lydia's revi.. read more
Ken Simm.

4 Years Ago

One of the Walker brothers. The song No Regrets of The Sun Don't shine Anymore is what I'm hearing. .. read more
One leaves that grief in time however that annoyance of wonder will never cease to pound at you, well done, good read.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you for picking this piece. I appreciate the review. :)
Very interesting collection of thoughts & actions as he bumbles thru the various aspects of grief & loss . . . kind of disjointed sounding, as one's thoughts might be at a time like this. When I read the title, I was on a completely different track, reminded of an oral session from way back, when I had nothing to wash it down. Your use of the selected words is seamless & not even noticeable except for the bold font. Love this: "His need to perforate holes In the wall of grief around him"

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks. I really do like these contests. The bold font is the one downside, but I understand it make.. read more
Great poem, you feel the poor guys loss, and sad to say, you sort of want him to join her.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much. The 10 words I give contest is my favourite on this site.
Paul Bell

4 Years Ago

Sort of learning as I get along on this site. Glad you managed to get abridge in.
You have used those words to create perfection... Loved the way you have created an emotional thought provoking write with those words... The poem speaks clearly... Very well done...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I do admit I am pleased with the results of this challenge.

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