with Teeth

with Teeth

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
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Title inspired by nature and Trent Reznor

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The rain had teeth that day
I saw the crooked finger of God 
Spread the Devil's legs 
In a complacent sky. 

We were together the day 
I bought my favorite umbrella. 

Funny such things should even 
Be held in my head.  

An umbrella is no comfort 
On days 
When the rain 
Has teeth


© 2018 Lyn Anderson


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Man is insignificant to the force of nature. Reading this your words of imagery are brilliant. not familiar with the song but very much familiar with the artist. Johnny Cash version of Hurt Brilliant

Posted 5 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing
Rain that had teeth. A great storm. Your description made the reader believe and understand your words. Thank you Lyn for sharing the amazing poetry. I liked this one.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you kindly dear sir. I love your poetry
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

Thank you Lyn and I love your work also.
Great new poem, tastes just like the old you.... Neville

Posted 5 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

Well sometimes we regress. :)
Neville

5 Years Ago

and dont it feel good........
I absolutely LOVE the second and third lines. Wow!
Really great piece! :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you darling. You, of all people, get me more than almost anyone in here.
Papaya

5 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
not sure the sky was complacent as it allowed that toothy rain to unleash it's fury... I love watching rain like this from the comfort of my front window... it's beautiful to see... but there is deeper meaning here and that kind of rain is hard to take...

there is really only one thing to say, Lyn, your poetry rocks...

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Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you. You are too kind. And I hate auto correct. It forced me to delete my first comment. This .. read more
I am trying to grasp this one. I may be digging too deep. It also feels like a someone's umbrella got trashed in a storm.


Posted 5 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

Oh most definitely. It was a deep wound, revealed in a particular storm
Jon Roggie

5 Years Ago

I feel a story growing....
Very different and unique. Imaginative and coming across as with teeth and nails. Teeth can carry many meanings.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks. A bit of an homage to a ghost of a thing that has teeth. :)
Sami Khalil

5 Years Ago

Wow! I like. You are welcome.
Everything seems perfect, with the possible quibble about God’s crooked finger spreading the devil’s legs. I don’t quite know what to make of that one so I file it under poetic license. How many points do you have on that license now? I do appreciate a rain with teeth, once bitten etc… Really a lovely piece of work.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Lyn Anderson

5 Years Ago

I remember you well. Once you helped me change something that was good into something much better. T.. read more
Delmar Cooper

5 Years Ago

I sent you something I ran across.

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Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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