notes I gathered

notes I gathered

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
"

things I jotted down

"

In time

In space

In you

In me


I am lost --


and that's

where

I should be ...

I ran into you

and into me

the moment

I felt your 

smile

penetrate 

my history

and be

come 

there's the window

that peeks outside

your room.


the tree,

the moon. 


and there, 


between 

 the pasture 

and forever,


is me.



© 2018 Lyn Anderson


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not easy to "capture" that time in a timeless moment ..really like the interwoven theme of intimacy ... and i like that you bring nature (the pasture) into things ... i always like this kind of form as it works its way down and across the page ... makes me pause with each little section ... but when i hit the "window" verse i says to me self ..oh...that is so cool! ;) i don't think the bold font in V1 is really necessary ... i understand that you want it emphatic ... but i don't think it is necessary ... and i wanted the last two verses to be on different steps ... now these impressions are not critical Lyn ... my sense of balance when looking at the whole form is what prompts my thoughts ... this is such a deep intimate personal experience in reading on love ... not just between lovers but on God too ...as the work with time and space draws thoughts of God to me ... for "just jotting down" you created a very emotive thought provoking poem says i! :)
E.

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Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

i don't know how anything is done on those phones but answering or calling someone ;{ so good on ya .. read more
Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

I fixed it how I like it. I always change the fonts up from one poem to the next.:)
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

;) read it again...so lovely!
I like all three, but the third one appeals more Lyn. Peering out of windows and gazing on the natural environment is definitely a me thingy. The tree, the moon, yep I've done that.

Chris

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Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

Thanks, that's mine too.:)
Christine Anne Shaw

9 Months Ago

Great minds and all that :)
I like the second write. Mixes with my sense of humor!

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Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

Thanks my friend, neither of us have been around much at the same time. Nice to see you
So beautiful dear Lyn.
"the tree,
the moon.
and there,
between the pasture
and forever,
is me"
The above lines. Perfect. Thank you for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

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Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

Thank you. That means a lot, coming from such a romantic poet.
Coyote Poetry

8 Months Ago

I love your work and you are welcome Lyn.
I simply can not decide which of this latest trilogy or 'trilyngy' I like the most... they each deserve to be mounted in their own write and on their own separate page, but then of course they would break that strict trilyngy mold......... N

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Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

Yes I know they are. Separate but not. Perhaps I should split them up and sew them up again. We'll s.. read more
Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

Yes I know they are. Separate but not. Perhaps I should split them up and sew them up again. We'll s.. read more
Neville

1 Year Ago

leave them as they lie ......
I love how your "thoughts" connect and make a whole, even as they each could be separate... there is a continuity here, a story with beginning, but no end.... your last few lines are so tender and filled with such emotional impact Lyn, I think you make all of us who read your words sigh and say I want some of that "forever".... this is one of your very best poems Lyn, at least I think so...

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Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

Why thank you darling. I appreciate that. I know I could edit these to be separate or connect them t.. read more
redzone

1 Year Ago

as do I Lyn... it is you, no need for them to be different than they are.... you allow the reader to.. read more
Love the idea of being lost and knowing that's where you are meant to be. Sums up my life really, a bit like having question marks for eyebrows, speaking languages others don't understand, but knowing that is where I am, more often than not :)

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Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the very perceptive review
Lorry

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :)
I feel as if there's a few poems, in these lovely notes.

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Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

There are. That is how they were written. :)
"...between the pasture and forever is me"
I like the sustain of that line, Lyn. It's lovely.
I think I understand where you were heading with the layout of this one, though I dare say the sweetness of intimacy and the internal shift would come through just as clear had you opted for a less flamboyant (?)structure ... Still and all, the content is romantic and dulcet. A lace curtain moves with the breeze.

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Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

thoughtful review. Yes, it is somewhat of a conundrum. I have always written poems in small thought .. read more
Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

I give up. Trying to edit my own comments. Autocorrect is having its way with me

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