I hate to rhyme

I hate to rhyme

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
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I am not much for strict rules of rhyme and metre. I thought i was just winging it. I didn't know it was a form. As per Richard's review (thank you)

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She ate her hate,

chewed on debate,

swallowed his lies;

dined on despise …


Drank his choler,

made him taller,

became a legend,

her soul bludgeoned.


Until that day,

she pushed away

from his table;

felt her able ...


To change her fate,

overturned his plate,

found her true love;

gave hate a shove.




© 2019 Lyn Anderson


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I like the way this tells a complete story of a woman's struggle through out life and still keeping the rhyme scheme. Whenever I read rhyming poems of others, it seems effortless to me, although I do know it's not..you more than winged it here btw ;) and I esp like the ending. Interesting write.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

7 Months Ago

Too kind my friend. I appreciate the visit. Always enjoy popping in
The worm that turned, and how satisfying that felt. She found the courage to break the chains that held her. Freedom. Great lines Lyn.

Chris

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much. I appreciate.
This sounds a little like a situation I am aware of the a woman facing years of abuse, not knowing what to do to end it until the opportunity comes and the world opens to show her there is life on the other side. So you are still in there writing?

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

Hello. Yes. And it's been a long time
John Alexander McFadyen

8 Months Ago

Yes I moved to Hello Poetry on advice, to avoid the troll who cloned my page.
This one is funny and powerful at the same time. We get the picture of a woman who has been living under the thumb of a spouse/ lover for a long time. The first two verses indicate she may have sacrificed her life to further his career. At a certain point, however, she could take it no longer. She pushed "away from his table," meaning probably she left him and found her "true love." Now he is history. An interesting work; it made me wonder if it is based on real people.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much. Spousal abuse is a common theme in my work, as it is a reality in many people's l.. read more
well I never, I didn't think you had it in ya.. actually that's not true.. I knew ya had.. I dont hate anything, except for those things I despise intensely .. actually, that's not true either.. I dont hate anything except...

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

Tee hee me too
Neville

8 Months Ago

I knew that cult would come in handy... :)
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love should always win over hate so the end is on point
and you know I love rhymes - I wonder sometimes if i'm the only one!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

I suppose i like them sometimes. Thanks :)
hating wears you out, it takes so much energy, rhyming is even hard, harder still to do it well. It is sometimes as hard as trying to make someone you hate into someone you don't. Some find it easier to walk off and start with someone else.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

Yes, most definitely, on all counts. Thanks for popping in
Your rhymes do not seem to be central to your message, even tho they are well-done & sophisticated & natural-sounding here. To me this is the goal of rhyming, not to distract from your as-always-powerful messages (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much. I consider your rhymes always entertaining, so I am honoured
Gosh, Lyn!
For one who hates rhymes, you've certainly shown exemplary skill at it in this rather quick-paced, jaunty bit of verse in expressing how deft you are at, not only enduring, but expelling the woes of a cad in favor of embracing the far more appealing opposite.
I love a love story with a good ending … especially, one that is told in such creative poetic brilliance.
A super lovely lavender rose, with spot-on music choice, too … ummm!

Thanks for the much needed smile … you're as a sweet balm! ⁓ Richard : )

You've done a fairly excellent job on this classic Welsh form, Lyn:
"Cywydd Devair Fyrion"
(keewiff dayour veeryun)
(poetry obliges reality)
A Welsh form, with only four syllables per line.
Rhyming Couplets or Quatrains. aa bb cc dd, etc; or, aabb ccdd etc;
no less than 4 stanzas, but no limit to how many.

Good stuff, You! ; )

Posted 8 Months Ago


Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

You're ever-so coincidentally welcome, Lyn.
What about the review(?) … LOL!
Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

I was thanking you for the review, and the education
Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

Oh,
I see, Lyn … well, it was my pleasure.
As you may know, I am not much for rhyme myself and always feel the need to rebel and add a final line punchline to break up the strictness of it all... But, this really works in its favour, as it is more impactful with its short and to the point lines, which makes me feel that that is indeed all the time you feel that part of the past deserves, yet with the last being a glimpse at not only making it out alive, bit of happy ever afters being improbably possible.
It just goes to show that hate and hurt can never truly win, or break us into giving up. So, the short punches of your words are perfect and the rhyme almost acts like a full stop/period to that erm, period :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Months Ago

Yes. I generally mix it up and play with it. But i was in a hateful mood. Thank you for your great r.. read more

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