I hate to rhyme

I am not much for strict rules of rhyme and metre. I thought i was just winging it. I didn't know it was a form. As per Richard's review (thank you)

She ate her hate,

chewed on debate,

swallowed his lies;

dined on despise …

Drank his choler,

made him taller,

became a legend,

her soul bludgeoned.

Until that day,

she pushed away

from his table;

felt her able ...

To change her fate,

overturned his plate,

found her true love;

gave hate a shove.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lorry]

As you may know, I am not much for rhyme myself and always feel the need to rebel and add a final line punchline to break up the strictness of it all... But, this really works in its favour, as it is more impactful with its short and to the point lines, which makes me feel that that is indeed all the time you feel that part of the past deserves, yet with the last being a glimpse at not only making it out alive, bit of happy ever afters being improbably possible.
It just goes to show that hate and hurt can never truly win, or break us into giving up. So, the short punches of your words are perfect and the rhyme almost acts like a full stop/period to that erm, period :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes. I generally mix it up and play with it. But i was in a hateful mood. Thank you for your great review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very cool...i don't like rhyme much either, but sometimes it just comes naturally...
i also like how you used near rhyme in here as well...a fun ride, Lyn...thanks.
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks a lot. I enjoy stretching my form every once in a while.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and doing it with such a theme...i love the reversal of roles..she gets the upper hand and leaves him with his plate overturned.

[redzone]

so inspite of hating to rhyme, your rhymed and with a 4x4 scheme... what more can be said but that you my friend are a poet... and a damn good one at that... plus, you gave rhyming a good thrashing.. in between those rhyming lines I could hear you saying, "there, take that you rhyming so and so.." ;0)

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, apparently this form is actually a form. I never knew, I just did it because i like fours