Breathes

thanks to Einstein Noodle for the inspiration

My love for you

It breathes between the lines I write -

It glistens at the corners of my eyes,

and plays peek a boo beneath my smile

alight with fleeting thoughts

of things as they were and are meant to be ...

My love for you

it does not wane, it grows and lives

it fills the spaces,

the dark and empty places

I never wished for you to see.

Author's Note

Reviews

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

such a emotion filled write, like the music you placed with this write. nicely done & expressed

[Lyn Anderson]

thanks very much

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

not a problem

[Laura Kate]

This is beautiful, a protagonist consumed with emption that it pours out of her and even finds space on the pages she writes. Lovely.

[Lyn Anderson]

Glad you picked this one, thanks

[Lydia Shutter]

What happened in the past is not important in the future...unless you make it so. Such a gentle love poem....with so much hope. I liked it. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much

[@_av_poetry]

This is a lovely poem about love. I like the metaphors and how the last two lines take you by surprise as the meaning gets a little darker than just a cute little love poem. Nice.

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you so much for stopping in

[Robert Trakofler]

it is all of your comprise, that dark behind those eyes
for if this loves to be, will embrace that space complete
pretty pretty pretty and lovely rhythm and rhyme flow and design

[Lyn Anderson]

A charming review, thank you for stopping in

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow, so profound as the protagonist expresses such love for a partner but is afraid they might be shocked at their previous life and behaviour, even if justified. That goodness only exists in the company of goodness.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for taking the time. :)

[Stella Armour]

Slowly opening your heart to him, and letting yourself become vulnerable in the trust that his love will protect you....

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. So thoughtful. Your words

[Stella Armour]

A pleasure to read your poems :)

[Neville]

As far as love poems surely go... this one will surely go very far indeed........ tis one of them that make this reader glow a little...... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

I hope so. Thank you.

[Neville]

.... pleasure

[barleygirl]

This is a great love poem with honest feeling. I can always count on you to stay far away from anything cliche. I love the way your message, as it nears the end, seems to reluctantly open up more & more to this love (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. I really appreciate it, since I know you're not a love poem kinda gal

[emmajoy]

Oh those secret humming and cooing places - mysterious and more than alluring.. cobwebs all, beautiful but sometimes, fragile! Perhaps the two need want the same to find their way. What is it about the dark that lures then captures?! Whatever it is, seems you've accepted the challend and have in finely set poetry.. Wonderful, Lyn!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you kindly. :)

[emmajoy]

You're welcome.