Undying fragrance

Undying fragrance

A Poem by Imperfection
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True :-(

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Like the undeniable scent

Of a withered flower

Its petals crushed between pages

 Of a book long forgotten

 

Your love has lingered on devotedly  

Even after I trampled over it.

Now I know no way of loving you, so

I keep the fragrance safe in my heart.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2008 Imperfection


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This is such a beautiful and sad piece...painful indeed.

"Its petals crushed between pages
Of a book long forgotten."- I loved this metaphor a lot and it moved me!

(I wonder why our best work always comes from this feel of pain and distress, may be because this feel is much more stronger than any happiness or joy....)

"Now I know no way of loving you, so
I keep the fragrance safe in my heart."- Very intriguing lines and made me read them over and over again..As, the feel had been beautifully explained !

Brilliant work!

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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I teared up while reading this. Beautiful!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It so sad and i can feel the pain but oh my god it's beautiful... i love it keep up the awesome work

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fasinating, I really like it, keep up the work. Great poetic soul

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What can I say? This is an amazing poem...poetically genius. It saddens me. Thanks for entering your poem into the Missing Him, Missing Her contest.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a Lovely little poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very strong and pretty, I really like this one, because you could pull many different meanings from it. And it is also quite beautiful, the imagery in it is exquisite.
You ought to be proud.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful word choice in this piece. Really pulls at the heart.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is overwhelmingly beautiful and imaginative, especially the first verse. I admire your ingenious thoughts. The poem is concise, says simply what it's meant to say and does have a lasting effect on heart. The words on the picture is also amazing. I liked the poem, a lot.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

My first instinct is to frown slightly and sigh "awww.... how beautiful," but I try not to give into those girly instincts. However, this was a very nice piece, especially its emotion. Most of all, the emotion helped this piece along. Starting it out with the graphic was also a nice touch.

The rhythm was nice and easy to follow. It was not overpowering, but it did really help this piece out and it made the lines and stanzas flow nicely together.

I would also like to comment on your word choice. I like the words you chose.
"Your love has lingered on devotedly / Even after I trampled over it." This line illustrates most vividly what I mean. You chose words like "devotedly" instead of a more boring synonym and "trampled," even when trampled sounds so harsh.

I really enjoyed this piece because it brought together several aspects of poetry that a lot of poets, including myself, fail to bring together.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful! Thank you for sharing, Debileah

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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