A single tear

A single tear falls from her eyes......wishing that she could cry oceans

Reviews

[Richard 🍃]

Wonderfully and palpably rendered, Dear Allie 🌼

By including the word "sad", this would become a truly brilliant 5/7/5 Senryu … goes to show how meaningful a single line of poetry can be. You said more in sixteen syllables than most of my poetry does in sixteen lines of verse.

A single sad tear
falls from her eyes......wishing that
she could cry oceans.

Whether line or Senryu, it swept my heart with a swoon, and that, Dear Poetess is good poetry.
Thank you for a most lovely treat! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[light and ashes]

Thank you for such a lovely review!

[Richard 🍃]

A true pleasure, Allie. : )
And, thank You!

[John the Baptist]

Sounds like deep pain, a lot of which defies releasing. When the feeling nature is ready, it will come.

[light and ashes]

Thank you for your words.

[Dave Skin]

Loved the dichotomy between "ocean's" and "a single tear". And the word economy, you say quite a lot in one line here. Most of the reviews will be longer than the poem.

[light and ashes]

True....but I'm ok with that. Thank you so much for your review.

[Carina Baumert]

A lot expressed in just one line - very beautiful and sad

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much. I really appreciate your review.

[Roland Petrov]

This reminds me of a haiku I wrote:

Her tear drops
Another pearl on
The carpet

Your poem is only one syllable short of haiku's standard 17. I wrote mine with 11 syllables because that's a closer approximation to the content of Japanese haiku.

[light and ashes]

I honestly didn't realize. I wasn't trying to write a haiku. Thank you for your review. I really like your haiku.

[moog-drika]

Even a line can show you a whole scenery of something. A very sad piece which we all can relate to it. I loved it.

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much moog-drika.

[kayT (Unspoken Poet)]

i know this feeling all too well, I understand this write.

[light and ashes]

I'm very sorry to hear you...
I hope it gets better for you.
Grieving is essential.read moreI'm very sorry to hear you...
I hope it gets better for you.
Grieving is essential.
We can not function properly without it.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Less is sometimes more....it all clears and helps the soul heal🌹🌹

[light and ashes]

Thank you for your insight and your review.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A good write as such is often the case with grief and depression; held inside or hidden behind a smile.

[light and ashes]

So true.....depression is a sneaky devil... especially so.. and it's not little either..
Thank you so much for reading and your review.

[Hayllie]

So short but so beautifully written! I love this!

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much!