Moth

I am a moth dancing around the fire.
The flames are tempted by my delicate wings.

My whole life I've come too close to destruction.

Destruction is what with what I am the most familiar.

An angel with tattered wings that barely fly.

The stars burn too bright for my eyes.

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like this L&A.
Two small points to consider:
first, it may be better to use the definitive article “the”, I am the moth, (adds a sense of separation I believe) instead of a moth (just any old moth).
second, I think the line will read better if you say “is that with which I am most familiar”.

Your call, just suggestions.

Winston

[light and ashes]

thank you.

[Pete]

same theme as icarus. when i saw the title i immediately thought of 'delicate' and flame. a fearful write dancing on the edge. those who play with fire usually end up getting burned no matter how innocent they may be ... :)

[light and ashes]

Absoultely, thank you so muvh, Pete.

[Betty Hermelee]

This is a wonderful metaphor you have created; but it could signify a person who is in a terrible state of mind, darkness all around, until and angel muse flies to your rescue and incites happiness in your otherwise black world ...the tattered wings is your slow death....but soon you will enjoy the light....in your soul.
Best, B

[light and ashes]

God bless you, Betty. I have so much love for you, because of this review.
You are very persceptive. This is, indeed, about a negative state of mind and being. I love your sensitive input. I think you are right..

[Betty Hermelee]

I'm so happy you like the review; It just hit me...
You're very welcome!
Best, B

[Mauricio Montoya]

ive never known a Moth to dance around they love to fly to point b hang around and devour what you cherish most, a nice sweeter, yet delicate by nature, i do love the metaphor, were a fragile creature i love the ending, yes the stars are to bright for our eyes.
Excellent write thank you for sharing.

[light and ashes]

Thank you for your review. This is kind of a depressed write, but I really love it. I was feeling like a moth at the time.

[Mauricio Montoya]

been there done that, lol but i love it too, a moth is better than a fly.

[light and ashes]

Lol :) for sure.

[Neville]

................. just you be careful out there and dont fly too high both the sun and the moon can be so very compelling ....

[light and ashes]

I really like that..... thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too my friend.
"I am a moth dancing around the fire.
The flames are tempted by my delicate wings."
I liked the above lines. I liked dancing near the fire. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[light and ashes]

Thank you, Coyote. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Chris Shaw]

Moths are attracted to light. They are drawn to it like a magnet. I have watched moths in action and thought how people too can behave in a similar fashion.

Chris.

[barleygirl]

I've always related to the moth-and-flame symbolism & you've taken it to a fresh interesting place. This reminds me of when a person gets addicted to romance that's volatile & you depict the damage in dynamic ways. Your last line implies this narrator is feeling the high cost & perhaps close to considering a change of habit (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[VJWild]

love how the flames are tempted by the wings

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.