Cigarette

Just like a cigarette you burn me up and burn me out until all that's left is the nasty gritty part that nobody wants.

Author's Note

This was written about my family.

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Wow. This is an absolutely brilliant metaphor. I’m just kind of speechless honestly- this is so unique but such a perfect metaphor! Toxicity is the worst and I hope your doing better now. There’s a sort of wisdom, kindness and magic in your words- this is definitely going in my favorites!

[light and ashes]

Thank you

[Einstein Noodle]

as a use to be smoker ... i confess .. my Da smoked Pal Mal kings .. no filter and when he crushed them out there was between an inch and an inch and a half left. when i ran out and wanted a cig, I only had to go as far as his nearest ashtray. ... and Light! all the really good stuff was in that last inch or so. ;))))))))
But your one liner contains such a heart rending story .. being used in an unbalanced relationship will most assuredly suck us dry .. only to be discarded when nothing is left .. the journey back from something like that not easy at all ... i fear some never do recover .. it robs our self esteem .. our drive ... our dreams ... heavy hitting .. and just one line and metaphor .. well done says i! i can feel you.
E.

[Ruth]

I understand the pain and depths of toxicity...one must survive and survive as they deem fit...sometimes such emotive lines must be purged in order to rise once more :)

[light and ashes]

Thank you for your wise words, Ruth. I agree. I am dealing with that now.

[Ruth]

Most welcome...the thing to remember is self worth, self love and self respect, all three will keep you in strength...

[light and ashes]

Thank you.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The dynamics of a family can be so diverse. It's the foundation we build from, that makes us who we are. I hope love and light will find its way to you, and be the strength you need to carry on.

[light and ashes]

Yes, but what if that foundation is really messed up and toxic?......
We can build our own foundation, at least that's what I hope for.

[Chris Shaw]

A powerful piece of brevity which leaves an after taste. Love gone sour. Well done light and ashes.

Chris

[light and ashes]

Thank you.

[Chris Shaw]

So sad to think this is how you feel about family. I can't imagine how painful that must be:(

[Betty Hermelee]

a powerful, honest statement in one line; says so much; it's much deeper than what's written I'm sure;e; So so sorry about your feeling for your family; i have some too... it's hard to say it though; I would have to write a treatise. Well done
Best, B

[light and ashes]

Thank you, I don't think most people understand what it is like to have a family full of toxic people.

[Betty Hermelee]

I totally understand! You’re very welcome and thanks for being so honest.
Best
Betty

[Shelley Warner]

I like that you use one line that is very descriptive. Good use of simile. I hope things some day get better with your family. It is OK to fee that way.

[light and ashes]

Thank you, for your kindness. I know it is ok to feel that way. It isn't my fault. It is their fault I feel that way. However, it still sucks for me a lot.

[Silmara McGarry]

First I must say that I really like the honesty of your poem...you know the truth of it...even in the way you let it out...like a unburned. It is amazing how deep down we can go when we let people drive us to their level. Since you said it is about family, don't let it get to you, fly above it and find your peace in such way that outside matters cannot affect you because you have learned how to deal with it without getting attached to it by understanding that it is not really about you, it is about them. Stay strong dear God is in you!!!

Hugs
Sil
:-)

[light and ashes]

Thank you, sweet soul, I appreciate it. Unfortunately, that easier said then done.

[Lydia Shutter]

Great simile. I can feel the emotion in this. Lydi**

[Laconic Meraki]

Woah . is all i can say.....

[light and ashes]

Thank you..