The London Eye

The London Eye

A Chapter by Rose
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I wrote this poem to show how I would like to propose in real life to the person who will be the one for me. I hope you enjoy it.

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I want to invite you,
For some nights away,
With me in the best place to be

To show a surprise
I know you have been waiting for
I will take you alone
Not for others to see
I will put you in a blind fold
I will hold your hands
I'll walk you to the place
To the best view of your surprise
I feel your excitement
But inside me...

I am shaking
My heart still though
Like a watch stops ticking
Knowing just one word
Could ruin my life
And I will watch it come crashing down
So please say yes
Say yes to my question

Say it please!
I will beg on my knees
The word NO I would hate to hear
As I will see myself cry a thousand tears
I will cry the longest river, the river Nile
All because of one word
Don't say it!

I will take off your blind fold slowly
As for your surprise
It is to see the best view,
Of the london Eye
In the night
Along a path of trees that light up
With blue shiny lights
Lights in so many wonderful colours,
Covers the London Eye
So bright for you to see

My important moment now
To sit you down
Give you a tiny box
Ask you to open it slowly
My heart racing as I ask the question
WILL YOU MARRY ME?




© 2012 Rose


Author's Note

Rose
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great to read this one again. the combination of the blindfold and the london eye and the special nature of the moment seems to say .. seeeeeee how I feel about you ..

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rose

7 Years Ago

That was my first poem I ever written. I wrote it when I was 14 which was about 5 years ago. I feel .. read more
R J Askew

7 Years Ago

it still reads good to me
Oh! This is so romantic and happy! I loved it. I sure hope she said yes! =)

Posted 9 Years Ago


You are confident and positive ... and hopeful. This was an enjoyable and uplifting read. It is not about cutting, there are no f words, it is how things should be, and it communictes what you feel perfectly. Some people might scoff at such a dream, but I think it is bang on honest and good. I wld punch anyone who criticised such an expression of youthful hope. it is great to have hopes and dreams at any age ... and stick to them.

Posted 10 Years Ago


The poem is strong and believable, the blind fold, the eye, strong in the image of London eye. It hangs together. thanks raining

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hi,
Interestingly recognized form of the poem.
Interpretation and power of what is in this poem makes me
admiration and I must say that you're a brave young woman
full of feelings.
Good work:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is so realistically written; with so much touch of emotions and desires. Great romance. I'd like to read more from you. =)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I'm making up for reviews I haven't returned. So you may get a few from me depending :). OK, this was a sweet poem. I thought the 3rd and 4th stanza kind of through off its flow but you picked it back up in stanza 5 and 6. This was a sweet poem. Great Job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hmm...Until today, I think I've only heard of girls proposing in fairy tales :)

It is refreshing to see such a poem from a girl, expressed with such emotion and sincerity. I admire you for writing this and imbuing it with so much of character and romance; you've truly made it your own.

The only thing that made me stop for a second and re-read was,
"With blue shiny lights
Lights in so many wonderful colours," - with the word "lights" twice in succession, but relating to different things, threw me off a bit.

Well done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


nice poem..
very romantic..


Posted 10 Years Ago


I think you did a wonderful job. This is so very romantic, how could anyone say no. All the special attention put into it to make sure the moment was just perfect! Wonderful!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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