The London Eye

The London Eye

A Chapter by Rose
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I wrote this poem to show how I would like to propose in real life to the person who will be the one for me. I hope you enjoy it.

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I want to invite you,
For some nights away,
With me in the best place to be

To show a surprise
I know you have been waiting for
I will take you alone
Not for others to see
I will put you in a blind fold
I will hold your hands
I'll walk you to the place
To the best view of your surprise
I feel your excitement
But inside me...

I am shaking
My heart still though
Like a watch stops ticking
Knowing just one word
Could ruin my life
And I will watch it come crashing down
So please say yes
Say yes to my question

Say it please!
I will beg on my knees
The word NO I would hate to hear
As I will see myself cry a thousand tears
I will cry the longest river, the river Nile
All because of one word
Don't say it!

I will take off your blind fold slowly
As for your surprise
It is to see the best view,
Of the london Eye
In the night
Along a path of trees that light up
With blue shiny lights
Lights in so many wonderful colours,
Covers the London Eye
So bright for you to see

My important moment now
To sit you down
Give you a tiny box
Ask you to open it slowly
My heart racing as I ask the question
WILL YOU MARRY ME?




© 2012 Rose


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Rose
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A good Romantic setting for a proposal - though I would choose something that others had not used for the same purpose! You build up a nice sense of expectation with the blindfold and then all is revealed... Not quite what I expected, I have to admit but I guess it's every girl's dream... Well constructed writing... good control

Posted 11 Years Ago


This poem can relate to either sex, I think. For women, it is rare, though often perhaps imagined. I think what lifts this poem above being ordinary is the self-questioning fear and self-doubt that should (though not always; to the peril of the unprepared) go through the mind of the suitor. By doing this the poem captures the precarious nature of love; and the ending -with the ultimate question- is like the words standing on a cliff-edge, asking to be saved.
So, your words, it would appear, are not -at least here- in vain.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I like this poem. I was in London many times a long time ago. I love the old city. Poem is beautiful. The movement and desire was very good in your words. I like the set-up to the very good ending. I hope the sweet dreams fall in order for you. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


not many girls propose, in the U.S so that would be a intersting sight, i liked it because its orginal not many people talk about proposing when they write love poems. You have a orginal theme along with good word choice thats not hard to read. Nice job

Posted 11 Years Ago


One day I must visit London and see this sight for myself.

Although it does describe a very specific situation, I really enjoyed the poem. I like poems which I can relate to my own life, however I think anyone with a heart should be able to empathise with the mixture of emotions portrayed in this one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nice job Rosie, a compelling little poem that sounds like it comes from the heart in a romantic way with a strong desire as the theme. I would love to see a sight like that when the blindfold was taken off me. Ha

Posted 11 Years Ago


sounds wonderfully romantic

Posted 11 Years Ago


It takes the depth of the heart to get to that place where the paid critics will call it art. Way to go Angelkiss - I think you have one here.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Thanks for your reviews I will keep up with the good work

Posted 11 Years Ago


Great story Angelkiss. I love the London eye with the blue lights. Now who could turn down an offer like this?
David

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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