His Voice In My Mind

His Voice In My Mind

A Chapter by Rose
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I once met someone who could never stop talking, he talked that much it got on everyones nerves. But his voice never got on my nerves so I wrote a poem about it

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Talking and talking
His voice sticks in my mind
I would be able to remember it for years
The sound of it
Makes you fall in love
His voice so gentle and kind
Hearing it all the time
To relax my mind
Makes him look a calm caring person

Unforgetable
But you still want to hear it
Running through your head
It takes away all your bad moods
Leaving just love
And thats all you feel

His voice repeats in my head
I can still hear him even when his mouth is closed
Its more better then any other sound
More peacful then birds singing
His voice will always be heard
I hope I will never forget
Or I will miss the sound
Overnight until I see him again

Everyone has a favourite sound
like when listening to music
Or listening to nature
But his voice I love most of all
I wish I could record it
I love his seriousness
I love his cheerfulness
I love his laugh
I love his jokes
I even love the sound of him weeping
Just talk to me again and again, honey
I don't want your voice to end



© 2012 Rose


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Good for you Rosie ... Some voices have a quality that soothes the soul in us or is so lyrical that we reach beyond the quantity of their words ... I don't think I know anyone who's voice could do it for me the way your chatty pal does and I tip my hat to you. I'm not one for constant chatter so I'm sure I'd be unnerved but you never know. Thanks for sharing... Good listening, RC ...
GBU

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I think everyone knows of someones voice that just is soothing to them. Some people just have that quality. Nice work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


There is word repetition and I would add commas and periods to control flow. It's not a bad piece, just needs that finishing touch to make it complete.

**NOTE. My policy on reviews has changed. I will be happy to review on or two pieces of work, but will do no more without compensation. People are payed to do this kind of thing, don't think you'll get free editing from me.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ha ha, I give him credit for talking at all. At my school, everybody hardly ever talks. If they don't know somebody, it's a graveyard.

I don't have a friend like that, but I do know a guy like that. I love his voice and if I wasn't so shy, I would get his number so he can just talk and talk. I would waste the summer listening to it.

Anyways, your buddy seems kewl and thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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i really like the way you have converted this person..the way he talked..said it got on everyone nerves..but you change the way of it...that's really skillful..

Posted 10 Years Ago


Talking can soothe the mind and soul
Its great when we find someone we could listen to all day!lol
Actually, the reason for that may be the wave forms created by their voice, you maybe resonated with their tone!
xx

Posted 10 Years Ago


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think you've done an awesome job describing him and his voice. absolutely picturesque, don't think i'll ever think about a talkative guy the same way again. great job

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was just sooooo good. I love how you write about his voice. It's so sweet. Very good.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You certainly seem impressed by that magical voice. A poem of this sort works well as a 'memory piece' and doesn't have to be filled with metaphor to be good. I think, though, a little more colorful language would enhance the reader's appreciation for the voice you remember here. The two things I'd really pay attention to in any revision are the change in voice (I changes to you in stanza #2) and the fact that all stanzas say pretty much the same thing - they don't carry the reader through the range of emotions you fell (felt) when listening to the voice (I guess I'd say there is no theme that progresses through the stanzas). I'd also watch for punctuation (its instead of it's, for instance) and avoid grammatical things like 'more better.' The idea of focusing on the voice is really a good one and the emotional content of the poem cannot be topped. :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is a fabulous poem!!! Full of beautiful memories, n' yearning for those memories to never ever end! You stuffed it full of undying love, n' it shows! I will have this poem running in my head all day long today! ㋡

Posted 10 Years Ago



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