Two Hearts and Two Souls

Two Hearts and Two Souls

A Chapter by Rose
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I wrote this thinking about someone in my life what I love deeply.

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How I long to hold

And touch him

Fear holds me back

I want to touch him all over

In many different places

Where beauty bursts

Like flowers underneath his clothes

Making me want to stroke

Every petal spreading it's true colours

 

The fear holds me

It keeps me chained

So I can not move

Fear that he would mistaken

Me for a joke

He's like a hot steamy iron

Steam floats out of his head

I will get burnt if I touched him

Scarred for life

It will sting for days and nights

His horrid look

Full of hate

Would flatten and scold me

The pain will last and be remembered

A laughing stock I will be

In front of my enemies

My hands will never touch again

 

I wish to be taken

Away with him

To a place more secure

More safe and alone

I don't want to ask him anything

I just want to hold and

Have him in my arms

Just like two souls and two hearts

If he asked me to speak

Nothing will come out of me

Well only three words

I love you!

 



© 2012 Rose


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the first portion was too awesome. OMJ! i just love the part where you said "where beauty burst" that's my fav part

Posted 10 Years Ago


Carefully handled. I liked this one at the very first sight. If otherwise written, this would've been a nonsense. However, you've made it a handsome poem. It's good to see young (Younger!) talents. Do write more.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very easy to relate to. Good work bringing forth these type of emotions.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow tthats was very nice. It's not everyday you se a love poem like THAT. Excellent. IN the secoond Stanza however do you mean "Mistake instead of "mistaken"? Still excellent theres just that tiny little blip there. Don't worry about it though Grammar doesnt take away from the feeling you get and i can tellthis is from your heart, Its excellent.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is beautiful, the imagery here is very strong and vivid.
Very well penned!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I LOVE IT...it's something i would imagine myself saying in my mind...great job

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great imagery :). It shows the uncertainty and longing that comes from loving someone in a more interesting way.

Posted 10 Years Ago


very good write.
i really like this. (:
very beautiful. (:

Posted 10 Years Ago


Such beauty and love in the words. When we are overpower with love and emotion there is no limit to our love. Total poem was very good. I like the ending a lot. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is quite nicely balanced overall between doting love and fear of rejection. In the end it is merely obsession, because to fall in love without any connection will always be a sacrificial dream and disillusioning. Which is why the idea is better; and to be expressed in words is prettier...!!
I'm not a fan at all of love poems -there are far too many of them- but this one is relativley palatable as it expresses a tender humility and timidity which gains it a certain sympathy in its reading.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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