Own Me

Own Me

A Chapter by Rose

Hold the key

To my emotional love

Hidden within my heart

You have the power

To unlock and open my heart

 

Own me for life

Give me a sense of belonging

Be with me

Be the one to hold me

Under the moonlight

Look after me safely

Guide me through

the up's and downs of my life

 

Show me what true love is

Show me what a first kiss is

Be the one and the only one

I could spend a lifetime with

 

Give me experiences

Of mixed emotions

Feelings of pleasure

Feelings to remember

Give me memories

Photos of me

Enjoying every moment

 

Wihout you I will suffer

So just spend a lifetime

To be only with me

 



© 2012 Rose


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"Own Me" is hardly a romantic title - hehe - a little devious if you ask me :P

Nice write, but I have to bring up the repetition of the word "heart" on the 3rd and 5th line. It's like a deja-vu when reading it in such quick succession...it made me pause for sure.
I also felt like the 4th stanza lacked something that the other ones had; I cant decide what so I apologize.

All in all good :)


Posted 9 Years Ago


This my friend is so sweet,true and innocent..that it almost made me choke with that strange sensation,cause when someone writes something with such a lucid love it simply makes me overwhelmed with happiness.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Aw how cute! I really like this! Nice write! keep up the good work! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


I think you have the desire down packed and I am sure you can follow this up with the proposal poem you wrote and you will have him forever for sure. I think you are one with a silver tongue all men beware. This is another great write by you.

Posted 9 Years Ago


this is a heart felt write. The flow is smooth and the I love the first stanza in this poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Great write. It is filled with the longing that reminds me of innocent things.

Posted 9 Years Ago


oeeh cute poem XD like it

Posted 9 Years Ago


Excellent work- nothing like a poem that's full of emotion and innocence.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I remember I use to write a lot like this when I was your age. Love was always the topic first and foremost on my mind. I think this is my favorite one of yours so far. I mainly love the lines "Give me memories
Photos of me
Enjoying every moment"
Almost as if memories to you are like a rich chocolate cake that you like enjoying on a rainy day!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ah, way way back in my human form, my first love was about your age. I shall never forget her and your poem has brought her memory back to the surface once again!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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