Not a Love Bite

Not a Love Bite

A Chapter by Rose

There is no love in this bite. No love will come by nagging.


I love him,

With all my heart

I really want to give up everything

But I cannot give up,

Being a vampire

It's a curse

I am cursed for life!

I am like a monster at night

My lover carries a knife


I commanded him to blind it,

Underneath his pillow

He says he feels like a widow

His life is empty

I cannot come out,

In the sunlight

He calls me dead

Then he see's me,

Awake at night


I wish I could hear,
His thoughts through the day
Instead I cannot be awake
I have to sleep deeply,
In my coffin
One night I requested to hear,
From his heart and his mind
He could not bury it from me


Well he could not any longer
He confessed to me
That he hungers to be a vampire
I stand in shock
I would hate him,
For taking away his well-beloved life
To be a hideous monster like me
I am a murderer


I suck the beauty of the innocent
I kill them in their sleep
So they do not open their eyes
To the light and day,
Of their dreadful killing life
I have never touched him
The knife was his saviour
To protect him from me

He will not be able to cope,
Through the agony of the bite
It will hurt me,
To see him cry
It's not that great to be me
But he insisted,
He begged,
He went onto his knees


Oh please, oh please
He repeated and screamed
He was not going to give up
He grabbed hold,
Of my moving feet
Strongly glued me to the ground
He became annoying
He continued to nag

As the night went quick
I had not drunk,
A thing, not a drop of blood
My eyes sobbed
He has made me suffer
He refused to use the knife
I was losing control
Longing for a bite


I could not bare,
To sleep another day
Without a drink
My teeth sunk,
My teeth sunk into him
After mouthfuls
I stopped in shock
Then I realized what I had done...









© 2012 Rose

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Hmmm, I don't see what's so wordy about it. The words are fine to me. The only thing is that I can't really tell if this is a straight up metaphor or a plot line developing within the vampire poems. Otherwise, this was pretty good. I don't have much to say. The enjambment is amazing. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Great job(: I really like this,
i love poems and stories about vampires

Posted 10 Years Ago

This isn't your best piece. It has good form and the wording is okay. I just know you can do better. Just think about it a bit less and just let it flow freely.

Posted 10 Years Ago

I second Gomer. I am not into this vampire thing at all. But reading your poem, thinking it to be about the general temptations of life, makes it a good read. One can't always get away from one's temptations. They have a way of bringing us down. Well written.

Posted 10 Years Ago

this was good.

Posted 10 Years Ago

vampires, vampires and more vampires. i say this because i was reading an "Underworld" graphic novel, lol. anyway this is great work, and your poem structure is really unique, gives it extra feel, as well as all the emotions here. epic

Posted 10 Years Ago

Sometime the temptation and hunger can't be controlled. The story in your words told a story of a battle to maintain sanity with two different kinds of people. I like the set-up and the ending. When you deal with something that can't be controlled. You are dancing with death. A outstanding poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago

this is pretty cool even though I'm not really into the bloody vampire thing. I really like the effect you created in the formatting. It was almost like reading in stereo. nice job Ms. Crabtree.

Posted 10 Years Ago

I can't help it but I love vampire topics lmao
This is great! I love the structure, makes the reader think more! A really good poem love!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Wow, this was really good! Extremely epic!! I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on June 16, 2010
Last Updated on June 28, 2012
Tags: vampires, bites, love, dark, fright



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