Lights out

Lights out

A Chapter by Rose

Show me,
The beauty,

 

On your skin
I see petals
Stretching for light
To be absorbed
So they can live longer
They beg and crowd
Around every tiny hole
In your jeans
Dying to breathe

I would hate to see
Your beauty suffocated
Hidden, underneath your clothes
How can anyone tell?

 

Your eyes,
Don't see,
What I see,
The beauty within
You complain,
The worst is happening
The red rashes spreading
The itchy scabs forming into scars
Your nightmare
Grows on your skin
You have an allergy

 

More and more
It grows
The worst in your eyes
With every tear
That falls
The lights fade
In your home

 

Within my eyes
I see the best
Of the conflict
The flower has to fight,
Hidden, underneath your clothes

 

Take them off in the dark...

 

 



© 2012 Rose


Author's Note

Rose
I wrote this poem thinking about skin allergies. I once knew somebody who had a really bad skin condition. It made life hard for them as they were allergic to everything they touched which included soup. This lead to the allergy affecting their self-esteem too.

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it does so much affect people self esteem this poem is wonderful because there are alot of people with skin allergys wonderful job

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love the loving way you embrace what they most hate about themselves. Very lyrical. the metaphors make what most would think are ugly seem like points of beauty. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


An interesting piece. Several levels of meaning to be gleened. That last line gives one a whole lot to take and run with. It could be applied in so many ways and to so much. As it stands as encouragement for the person you wrote the poem about, it's great as is as well. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


It started out as being some what sensual kind of like innuendos
and then took a sharp turn into being something completely
different. I think you have achieved a new refreshing type of
stlye here...

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This was something really unique. A great change of pace from the usual that I read. I had eczema around my eye once. Even though that's a small part of the face, people would still stare at it and ask me what was wrong with my eye. Anyway, I thought this was quite good and flowed fairly nice as well.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I think people often see only the worse in themselves and if they have some sort of 'problem' whatever it may be those feelings are only increased. You did an awesome job on writing this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I have mixed feelings about this poem. I'm not sure about the first two lines... I'd like them as the title were the poem to move off in a slightly different direction (not being ashamed of the condition, but being more open and accepting of it). The second stanza is done with nice poetic language (imagery, metaphor) then the next devolves into relatively coarse descriptions of the condition. The fourth stanza seems to take a middle ground in this dichotomy and is hard to read - I don't quite know where the thoughts break (after 'grows' and 'falls' perhaps, but it seems there are three disjointed ideas in the stanza and I really don't understand the notion of the lights in the home fading). The fifth stanza is like the second - more poetic and even seems to refer back to the thought in the second stanza, though I don't know what the flower is fighting. The closing stanza represents the despair of the affected person and belatedly sets the tone for the poem which contrasts with the opening lines. So, I like the poem but am conflicted by the aforementioned issues, especially the contrast between the beauty at the beginning and the implied shame at the end. You do a good job with the empathy here and carry though nicely with the flower analogy (the petal early on and the flower later). Good effort.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This was a wonderful piece. It is amazing the loss of self esteem and the feeling of sadness when one has allergies or other skin disorders. You feel as though no one looks at you the same way. I have a bad case of psoraisis that flares up from time to time and I can relate to this really well. This was very well written piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


The allergies can make a life very difficult. Your description was very good. Poor people who have to live with them I do pity. As always your poetry had purpose and strong story. Thank you. A excellent poem.
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Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow... I was way off the mark reading this. I love the way the words weave in and out of the fabric of this poem, forming a perfect seam... almost abstract in the way they connect, but connecting in all the right ways. Great read! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago



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