Your selfish living inside my heart

Your selfish living inside my heart

A Chapter by Rose

My fingertips,

Spread,

Stroking,

Pressing,

Feeling the love

From head to toe

Lips touching

Kissing your smooth skin

Lying as I comfort your legs

Stroking them gently

Your legs treated

Like fur from a cat

Your voice tells me

How much you like to be

The main focus of the night

 

Your body

Heats the room

The temperature

Reminded me of red

You strip

Feeling delighted

To be in bed

In your eyes

I can see it written

All over your face

A smile stretches your lips

You're glad to be wanted

Throughout the day

Feeling even better

Wanted throughout the night

 

You're someone,

Unique and unforgettable

You love to socialise

It's easy for you

To find another like me

Another to let down

In revenge to attack me

For having a life

That is so much better

 

I adored you

You're now a memory

A fantasy

A dream

A nothing

Just something sexy

To have in my mind

So I can go to sleep

At night...

 

 



© 2012 Rose


Author's Note

Rose
Opinions please.. This poem is about how selfishness can break up a relationship. The pain of it you just never want to feel it again.

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I'm always astounded after I read your work, because every time I do, I remember why I fell in love with poetry in the first place, the flow of word, the meaning behind simple things, it brings life to lifeless things and that makes it beautiful. I could go on a huge long rant, but I don't want to waste your time.. Instead I'll tell you what I want you to hear, and it's that your work is incredible, thank you for sharing.
-Cathrine

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Beautiful form ! Your words acting as lines made so much more impact. It was wonderfully constructed from top to toe. I really liked your poem. Great WORK !! Keep the good lines flowing :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I think this is really nicely written. I hate when people are selfish when it comes to a relationship. Like in the movie No One Would Tell. He killed her just because she couldn't be just his. If I can't have you then no one can. It is what that movie is about besides being abused in a relationship. I liked this poem a lot. It made me feel better about myself because I know I'll never be in a relationship like that...and if I do end up in one than I know I need to get out of it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I enjoyed this poem. I read the speaker as having a calm tone thoughout every line, as if saying "I've come to peace with this.." as your last thought before going to sleep at night which shows a lot of independence. The picture it paints in my head also gave a good feel and flow to the poem. Nice.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You have maturity beyond your years, and this writing shows this so obviously.
It truly is impressive.
River

Posted 10 Years Ago


To feel the pain from that breakup is shattering to the very soul!
This is wonderfully voiced love! To retain some fragments of the relationship in my mind and heart is sometimes the only way to get comfort - powerful words love!
xx

Posted 10 Years Ago


I read the poem before your note. The first verse is full of confidence. I like 'heats the room' and 'reminds me of red' for the sensuousness you convey. 'A smile stretches your lips' was very evocative. I cld see said smile and sense a certain suspicion of it, maybe. ~Ach, and then the disappointment in verse three. And the gentle sting in the final verse which relegates said disappointment to the status of ... something insubstantial, a no thing. I like the title also.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I thought this one was very good.

Posted 10 Years Ago


i really just can't describe it. a masterpiece woven from amazingly complex and detailed feelings. a flowing piece of fabric with the perfect texture. i love this poem. if its not too much to ask would you take the time to review some of my work? any at all :) your flaws are flawless!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Passionate beginning turns into a sad feel. What a heartless guy. Love your creative choice of words. Very good pen on this poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You write with detail and this piece totally defines every aspect of your thought. Great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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