He says hello and walk in

He says hello and walk in

A Chapter by Rose

I am trapped,

I am locked in,

For years

I have twisted and turned

The stiff handle

Sticking out of the door

Dripping with sweat

From my palm

I have pulled

With all my strength

 

The door,

As heavy as a rock

My life has gone

Spent on trying to open the door

I have had tears

I have had pain

But no one has ever heard me,

Screaming and yelling

From the other side of the door

 

Never have I given up

Not while my body breathes

To say I'm still alive

 

Then I suddenly hear

An echoing voice

Coming from behind the door

A loud and beautiful voice

The sound of a man

Asking me to open the door

And walk in and say hello

 

I spoke but no reply

After that it was a voice

I heard often

When I felt like giving up

 

Trapped,

With no light

Starving with no food

I often feel

I am going to die

But my hopes are still strong

I know I am still alive

But I feel dead inside

 

I wonder...

If my hopes are strong enough

To break down the door

 

I think I know

What's behind it

The voice I have been hearing

I guess it's the door to his life

 

I wish to walk in and say hello



© 2012 Rose


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Very good emotion to this. I like it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lots of strong emotion. I think this can be taken in several different ways and is very identifiable to many. All good because I believe poetry needs to relatable as many folks as possible. Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


A poem of the harshness of being trapped with only the vague hope of being rescued. Such a struggle just to keep going.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Clever piece love!
A great poem :)
Vividly haunting actually! lol
You are very talented with portrayal of emotions!
xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good write. A lot can be taken from this, depending on the readers frame of mind at the time of reading. Really great descriptions and a feeling of struggle painted with hope.

Posted 9 Years Ago


You did well to convey a tense drama here with good feelings and the cogent images of the door, nice one.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I so know this feeling of being stuck in life and its hard to find your way back but never give up and once you do find your way what a wonderful feeling love this poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


I often feel like this about writing ... there is a door ... on one side I waste my life writing ... I have no idea how to open the door or even what is on the other side, but I can't stop writing or wondering. Ach! You've captured the feeling of longing really well here. Of course we have to overcome the door somehow.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Never have I given up
Not while my body breathes
To say I'm still alive

You have captured that indomitable spirit perfectly in these lines which were my favorite of all of them!!!

xxoxx

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very well done. I love the feeling.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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