A Chapter by Rose

You sat there

While she got dressed

Taking her clothes off

All she had

Was lust in her heart

The power of lust

Made the bed feel dark


The real love,

I was thoughtful about

Felt killed

Choked by her kisses

Broken by her body

Chained by her filthy hands

Stabbed by her teeth

I felt like,

I saw my own death


But what did I do

To deserve this?

From you

Of all people

My love,

Can't you see

What you have done to me?


I must go

I must run

Before you can stop me

I will be gone

Before you know

Gone from your life



If you can


If you must

But nothing

Will bring me back


I will feel healed

Born again

From you crushing

My soul,

Breaking my heart in two


For once

I will be happy

As I did something good

And that's to break free

From living with you



© 2012 Rose

Author's Note

heart-break definitely

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This was a really captivating write! I liked how you seemed to pour everything you had into this piece, as it made it a really believable and relatable poem. There were moments, particularly towards the end, where I felt as though you lost some of the intensity that was prominent at the start of the piece, but in saying that, I liked the fact that you were able to showcase the multiple dimensions of such a situation in a really simple and hard-hitting way. Great work,

Posted 9 Years Ago

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The pain and struggle and guilt, how it can feel like death and when broken free from can feel like a new breath of life. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago

This is a tough one - a heart breaker. Not a lot of poetic form to it, but the subject matter doesn't need anything but the raw emotion I guess - and you got that nailed. There is a bit of logical error in stanza two... 'while she got dressed / taking her clothes off.' I think the transition from stanza two to stanza three is a bit rough - you've been writing about 'you' and 'her' and suddenly introduce 'I.' I know what's going on (I think) but the sudden appearance of 'I' is jarring enough that I had yo look at it a couple of times... I figure that anything that 'jars' a reader (except for shock poetry) needs to be smoothed out... just an opinion. Keep up your fine work.

Posted 9 Years Ago

good piece

Posted 9 Years Ago

I told my children. Be careful with emotion. We can become dead in heart and soul very quickly. Don't waste your love and kindness on useless people. I like the beginning of this poem. A undertone of need and pain. Life is a fair journey. Each of us must test the boundaries. A very good ending to a powerful poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Oh wow, how sad. This sounds really dark and deep.

Posted 9 Years Ago

You expressed the deep hurt here very well. One can relate.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Good poem. I like the vividness of the descriptions in the third stanza--like being stabbed by her teeth.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Well, I'm glad to see it doesn't only happen to me...insofar as me not being so unique in this arena.

Another well done piece of work.

Posted 9 Years Ago

You capture the drama of how life twists many of us around, driving us to crave physical excitements which then leave us confused and regretful as the counter emotions surge over us. Someone will be feeling exactly as you describe right now, possibly even in the same street. It is everywhere.

Posted 9 Years Ago

This is so touching love! Emotively shattering scenario!
You have captured the emotions of such a heart aching situation really well love!
Wonderful work

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on October 1, 2010
Last Updated on June 28, 2012
Tags: break, pain, cry, tears, hate, life, bed, lust



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