Adultery

Adultery

A Chapter by Rose

You sat there

While she got dressed

Taking her clothes off

All she had

Was lust in her heart

The power of lust

Made the bed feel dark

 

The real love,

I was thoughtful about

Felt killed

Choked by her kisses

Broken by her body

Chained by her filthy hands

Stabbed by her teeth

I felt like,

I saw my own death

 

But what did I do

To deserve this?

From you

Of all people

My love,

Can't you see

What you have done to me?

 

I must go

I must run

Before you can stop me

I will be gone

Before you know

Gone from your life

 

Cry,

If you can

Beg,

If you must

But nothing

Will bring me back

 

I will feel healed

Born again

From you crushing

My soul,

Breaking my heart in two

 

For once

I will be happy

As I did something good

And that's to break free

From living with you

 

 



© 2012 Rose


Author's Note

Rose
heart-break definitely

My Review

Would you like to review this Chapter?
Login | Register




Featured Review

This was a really captivating write! I liked how you seemed to pour everything you had into this piece, as it made it a really believable and relatable poem. There were moments, particularly towards the end, where I felt as though you lost some of the intensity that was prominent at the start of the piece, but in saying that, I liked the fact that you were able to showcase the multiple dimensions of such a situation in a really simple and hard-hitting way. Great work,
~PaperHearts

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

Finding the strength to walk away from a bad situation always takes courage, yet brings far larger rewards down the road. This piece was powerful, vivid and captured the feelings of pain and need of seperation that was created by a bad situation.

Good Poetry!
Wolfie

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Surely is, and the folks involved with breaking up the relationships are often so surprised when the same thing they're doing is done to them. Guess they just never see that a louse is a louse. Very strong and emotional write. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sinful lust turning into shameful dust and the
tracks that it leaves behind when you run...
well done.

Adultery;
A voluntary sexual relations between a married
person and somebody other than his or her spouse

Posted 9 Years Ago


the tempo was fast, like you were racing to get away from him, it compliments the message in the poem itself. great piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This was a really captivating write! I liked how you seemed to pour everything you had into this piece, as it made it a really believable and relatable poem. There were moments, particularly towards the end, where I felt as though you lost some of the intensity that was prominent at the start of the piece, but in saying that, I liked the fact that you were able to showcase the multiple dimensions of such a situation in a really simple and hard-hitting way. Great work,
~PaperHearts

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

In your author's note, it's "heart-break," not "heart-brake." I don't know much about the differences in the words in the UK versus the US though. Break means to shatter into a million pieces, brake means to slow down.
The good news about that grammar fixation is that I didn't find any in your poem. I actually liked it a lot. The description helped the kinda nervous yet kinda solemn tone at the same time tone. Your poem was fast paced and intense. The message was pretty clear. Nice job.
PBP

Posted 9 Years Ago



3
next Next Page
last Last Page
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

1051 Views
26 Reviews
Rating
Added on October 1, 2010
Last Updated on June 28, 2012
Tags: break, pain, cry, tears, hate, life, bed, lust


Author

Rose
Rose

United Kingdom



About
If your love is dead Then you really wouldn't care My laughter will carry on Through out the night I think and I know I plan before I hurt I think of what I do You can fight back And I'll find.. more..

Writing
Fallen Fallen

A Poem by Rose


Writing To You Writing To You

A Chapter by Rose



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Smiles Smiles

A Poem by Tate Morgan