A strong sense of being needed come from these words, perhaps the person is really coming or perhaps its all just a painful dream never to be fulfilled.
Ach, you make me want to be esp nice, so that my loved one might think a little like that of me. I can't be sure that I will succeed, but the notion of your poem makes me thing the effort will be worth it. Well done. Your poem reminds me of what love is.
Great poem. I like the stanza arrangements--four line stanzas followed by one line stanzas seem to fit the mood well. I also like the repetition of "I saw" and "My" in the opening stanzas. On the constructive criticism side, I'd recommend some more detail toward the end, maybe some images or scenes. For instance, you could specify a bottle of what, and what exactly the speaker will cook. I love detail when it comes to food--that's my readerly bias, I guess.
I saw the first lines and thought of a magazine picture of a model of sorts, then as I got lower I then saw something else. Two meanings I received. yet each came form one feeling. The desperation, yes, of a love for someone they can't have. The feeling of loosing control in a way, begging, reaching out.. All in all, I really liked this. it says allot on what many woman and men, feel in today's times when they fall for someone they can not have.
You had me going for a moment with the first 5 lines - I thought I'd see a pattern with the shape of the poem and the rhyming scheme... maybe it would be fun to try to mimic these lines with a pattern in mind. The shape (4 line stanzas interrupted with single line stanzas) is easy to read, almost creates a sense of serenity, which the subject doesn't of course. I think I'd look at lines 9 and 20 (one needs a 'for' and the other might be shortened for eye and ear appeal). Overall, a well done piece of writing.
This piece does indeed scream desperate. I mean, it's a good poem voicing desperation, and it flows real well, but I don't like it. It's just not my taste, with that said. IT is in fact a great poem, It flows easily, it's got a great idea, and it has great words. You are indeed a fantastic writer, keep it up.
This write has a little edge of desperation but over all it has a positive feel to it. I'm sure as soon as he gets there the edge will be gone. Amazing job.
I liked these two lines. This hints at how clever you are. Overall, the poem was beautiful, as you likely know. These are words to soothe a beast, you know. Very good.