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TOVLI TEN-WORDs: 1. barrel / 2. roll / 3. cross /4. cloaked / 5. foggy / 6. stars / 7. vents / 8. dam / 9. freedom / 10. friends -the classic 10/40: use all 10 words in a poem with 40 words.

rocks roll tumbling through foggy

cloaked as stars dancing and humming

 

like a cross barrel Earth shakes , groans

vents making a dam

 

a  canal flooding freedom

sliding friends

flushing hugs...

... what goes up: falls?

well, new worlds rises!

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

You did a great job with the words. Lots of alliteration in your lines. I liked it. Lydi**

[angelina neves]

thank you!
(may be too much alliteration... ummmm but i had to come to 40 words! ) kkkkk
read morethank you!
(may be too much alliteration... ummmm but i had to come to 40 words! ) kkkkk
a hug flying

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words wise and true.
" what goes up: falls?
well, new worlds rises!"
I agree with the above lines and the logic of the words. Thank you Angelina for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[angelina neves]

Thank you again for your lovely comment!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Angelina.

[Paul Bell]

These are always tough. You've done well. Even reading it backwards is fun.

[angelina neves]

kkkkkkk thank you! I had not thought of reading it up side down but, as you said, it could be a nice way to read it

[Helena]

Wonderful Angi! Very good use of the "Ten" that made a very good write indeed. Good luck!

Helena

[angelina neves]

Thank you! they where quite difficult to play with! you know how I love these challenges (not for wining but just for the fun of it!) kkkkk

[Inda]

I really like what you did with the 10, the tone is wonderful as well, has a soothing quality to it.

[angelina neves]

thank you so much for your lovely opinion!