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A Poem by keith moncus
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i'm not ...

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hey



hey
im  not
a failure
a drunk
but not
a failure
a dope smoker
but certainly not
a lost failure
i know where
i might be
and where is that
huh say that again
nope ain't gonna repeat
you should have listened
i do not understand you
you appear out of nowhere
am i pestering you huh
go and sit down
im ready to tell
i'm ready to listen
tell me the story
like you did earlier
a good-hearted story
hey guys come listen
this guy can weave
a story not told
of yesterday and tomorrow
the shakes the tremors
the memories haunt me
we were baby killers
i hate you
i hate me
so so wrong
no excuse none
we did it
baby killers
mother killers
brothers dads
im sorry
so sorry
very sorry
help me
please

© 2022 keith moncus


Author's Note

keith moncus
many returned without visible scars
but war has a way of working its way into your conscience with memories forever
war kills body and soul
ironically it often takes war to achieve peace

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I had friends who came back from Vietnam seemingly unscathed....till I spent time with them and realized they would never be the same again. Killing another human being....even it means you will survive...is never easy to live with. Your staccato lines are so powerful. Lydi**

Posted 1 Week Ago


keith moncus

1 Week Ago

appreciate that
as much i would like to say i am not affected would be a lie. most of us, all.. read more
Visible and invisible scars. The visible ones can heal but, it is difficult to heal the invisible scars. I grew up around the military and saw the scarred bodies return to start their healing process. No one can imagine the pain of your actions except your brothers in arms. Your poem is an awareness that those scars still exists. Thank you for sharing soul and pain with us. Very moving.

Posted 1 Week Ago


keith moncus

1 Week Ago

thank you and you are right
all of us have hidden scars we never heal
life is not a bo.. read more
For the dead, war stops, for those who remain: We must offer peace of mind. For the very last battle is self hate.
It is okay to live your life and receive forgiveness.


Posted 1 Week Ago


keith moncus

1 Week Ago

it's easy to forgive, living with the realities is another matter
i know what i did, i accept.. read more
yes ... war leaves scars on everyone .. it is sad and tragic .. too many warriors can't express what goes on inside them ... so hard to unplug the adrenaline rush ... for some the grief of killing, as your poem states ..and for some the guilt of surviving ... i think our vets would all appreciate the acknowledgement that they do not talk about it much ... it's put to rest for a lot no matter the scars .. scars can mean healing too .. for some reopening them is somewhere they do not want to go... me Da never said a word about it .. those i know from our Viet Nam "War" .. never said much either .. one .. did show me his scar ... God bless us all eh!? :(
E.

Posted 1 Week Ago


keith moncus

1 Week Ago

i came back ... twice
you do not want to meet my scars
no god would allow us to do wha.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

glad you made it sir! we do it to ourselves don't we?! i think God's sorrow is so much that we don't.. read more
My father in law refused to speak about the war keith. His younger brother died in combat. He wouldn't speak about him either. He buried all the pain and hurt inside, of his time in the forces. Too painful to let it surface. This write of yours will be relatable to many. To veterans and their families alike. So many veterans end up with mental health problems and many end up homeless too. Our government in the UK needs to do more for their welfare. They gave so much.

War has no winners only losers.

Chris

Posted 1 Week Ago


Chris Shaw

1 Week Ago

I will also add that your posted artwork is striking. Standing tall amid the shadow that tries to bl.. read more
keith moncus

1 Week Ago

i cannot take credit for the image ... it came from my favorite image source PIXABAY
all imag.. read more
keith moncus

1 Week Ago

no cake no candles ... firing up my smoker for some rabbit, quail and guinea hen!
a feast fit.. read more

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who i am, what i be ... i write about that from which many shy. i am not afraid. i know the costs of living life for all it's worth. i am but complicatedly simple. i sing the words of no fear and ce.. more..

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