What I wished

What I wished

A Poem by deepblue04

What I wished happened when I was little.....

 

I wished my dad would play so playfully with me.

I wished my dad would have a nickname for me

I wished that I could tell anything to my dad...

 

I wished that I didn't have to be so tough.

I wished that I wasn't the oldest.

I wished that I wasn't expected so much.

 

I wished that my mom could understand me.

I wished that she could've eased up on me.

I wished that she let me be socially active....

 

These are some things that I thought of,

but I knew that they were trying to provide a good life for me.

But I kind of need somewhere to vent,

if you know what I mean...

© 2012 deepblue04


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I know how you feel, about wanting to be more social. I'm not even allowed to have a FB or a twitter (not that I don't have one anyways, but still, if they find out they'll kill me)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Sometimes the deepest thoughts come out in the simplest form. Venting, emotions, regrets...it's all there in one poem. But a very beautiful poem, even if only a lament. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


I can relate to parts of this, I think most people can. Great job. Venting or not, it's a great poem. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


I am the oldest sibling also. I have a little brother and because he is such a slacker of the family, my parents always expect me to be the best. And the way I see it, that doesn't really bother me because I know that when I do my best they are proud to call me their daughter and they are happier because of it. In my eyes, they want me to succeed because in return so will they. That's just what I tell myself when I start to feel like this and it makes me feel better in the end. :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


deepblue04

8 Years Ago

thanks
Being the oldest I find it really easy to relate to this. Its encouraging to know there are people in similar situations and even more so when we understand that all they want is really the best for us. Well written and straight to the point.

Posted 8 Years Ago


deepblue04

8 Years Ago

thanks!
My parents seem the same way. But I'm the youngest; people don't realize it's just as hard as being the oldest... I'm sure your parents just wanted you to have more oppertunities than they might have had. c:

Posted 8 Years Ago


deepblue04

8 Years Ago

thanks!
xxxrawr_friendxxx

8 Years Ago

No problemo. :3
Your poem states the feelings of many of the youth in today's society. There are far too many parents who should have done much more, just as there are many kids who should show more appreciation. But we're all imperfect, flawed and crippled in different ways. I like the way you ended some of the lines with ....

Posted 8 Years Ago


deepblue04

8 Years Ago

thank you!
Simple and to the point,its something can relate to...

Posted 8 Years Ago


This poem is outstanding and so amazing, but its sad at the same time.
Thank you for sharing this magnificent poem.
100/100

Posted 8 Years Ago


deepblue04

8 Years Ago

thanks!
It is hard being a parent. Children need attention and sometime hard to find time. I like your thoughts. Good to write down these thoughts. Maybe you can be a better parent one day. We can learn by the mistakes of other. A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


deepblue04

8 Years Ago

thanks!

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